The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in

The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in 2001. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie chart illustates the levels of skillfullness of male and female staff members at a company in British in 2001.
It is clearly that the percentage of male with highly skilled is nearly as twice as the category in female, 31% male with highly skilled is much higher than 16% famale's.

There is no much disparity in skilled part between male workforce and female staff, which are 28% and 32% respectively. The following numbers show that the proportion of skilled male is 4% higher than this female's.

Female wokers dominated in semi-skiiled with 29% while it is only 13% of male staff, lower 6% compare with female.
28% of unskilled male workes, a little bit more than 23% of this category in female, only 5% higher.
On the whole, males are slightly better at skills than females, that was shown in the pie chart by the comparison between 59% and 48%.

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"Please look over" is a pretty in appropriate for report writing. It sound too personal, however, this task aims at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you need to adopt a more appropriate tone. Be more formal in your style of writing for this task. Stick to reporting your observations and obvious trends only.

The pie charts compare the proportion of four different levels of skills of staff members of both genders in a British company in 2001.
If you want to talk about the country, use "Britain" instead of "British".



This is your overview. In this paragraph, you should mention the most remarkable features of the chart but you don't need to present any data here.

Hi there..


.. How did you get this number? you have to explain it more detail...


...and you have to wrap the information in conclusion because I think your conclusion same as body paragraph

I am not sure enough this is the right sentences. This indicates run-on sentences. (two main sentences running together)