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IELTS TASK 1 The chart shows the number of international students in the USA by subject.


j0NZICH 3 / 4  
Oct 12, 2021   #1

international students number by subject



The line graph provides information about the amount of overseas students and which subject they choose in the years from 2000 to 2004.

Overall, business and management is prevalent whereas social science and life science has the lowest number of enrollments by students. Engineering with mathematics and computing are somewhere between.

In 2000 the subject business and management had 100.000 students which will flactuate during 4 years, first goin up to 120.000 in 2002 adn then declining to 105.000 approximetly in the end of the period. The mathematic and computing classes saw a noticeble rise from 55.000 in 2000 to 70.000 comparing to the engineering which dropped to 65.000 from 75.000.

Two last subjects with the lowest quantity of scholars are social science and life science which are stayed the same with 40.000 attendees where only after 3 years in 2003, social science experienced an increase in number of students to 55.000 roughly.



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Oct 23, 2021   #2
The summary would have been improved and seen as a more thorough representation of the original image if the 4 subjects were listed as well. It would have delivered a completely scannable overview with a more complete task presentation. It would have also added to the clarity of the subject references in the trending paragraph. Every little scoring boost helps in your case since your English fluency is very problematic and can lower your score rather than improve it

will flactuate

@j0NZICH
Wrong tense usage. All references should be in past form since it started in 2008 and ended in 2004. These measured events have already taken place.

which are stayed the same

confusing sentence structure. It cannot be both in past and present word structures. This can only be past in reference

The essay will fail based on coherence and grammar rules shortcomings.


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