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the charts below give information about travel to and from UK.


bakhadeer 6 / 20  
May 12, 2014   #1
The charts below give information about travel to and from UK and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

Summary:

The line graph compares the number of travelers had been visited to and from the UK, during the period between 1979 and 1999. The bar chart illustrates the amount of visits by UK inhabitants in five outstanding countries in the last year of period shown.

It can be clearly seen that, visitors to foreign countries dominated under the number of guests were visited the UK, while the most popular destination was accepted as France.

Starting with line graph we can easily get a picture that, there was a moderate increase in both trends until 1986, by eight and five per cent respectively. During other thirteen years they continued their rapid rise and reached a peak of above 50 millions and just under 30 millions.

As is shown in the bar chart, the most distinguished places chosen by UK residents at around 10 millions of people, were France and Spain. The United States showed a moderate result with four millions and was followed by Greece at about three millions. And the least proportion of visitors at only two millions, chose Turkey among five different countries.




Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
May 12, 2014   #2
The line graph comparespresents a comparison between the number of travelers had been visitedvisits to and from the UK, during the period between 1979 and 1999. The bar chart illustrates the amount of visits by UK inhabitantscitizens in five outstandingpopular travel destinationscountriesin the last year of period shownin 1999.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 12, 2014   #3
It can be clearly seen thatOverall,UK visitors to foreign countries dominatedunder the number of guests were visited the UK recorded a much higher figure compared to the foreign travelers to the UK , while the most popular destination was accepted asof the UK travelers had been France.

Starting with line graph we can easily get a picture that, there was a moderate increase in both trends until 1986, by eight and five per cent respectively. During other thirteen years they continued their rapid rise and reached a peak of above 50 millions and just under 30 millions.

... you should have used more data and figures to support the trends in these detail paras. You have not adequately used the data given by the graphs.
OP bakhadeer 6 / 20  
May 12, 2014   #4
thanks for correction) can you give some structure for task that includes more than two charts? and what i should do if they are totally different??? thanks again in advance
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
May 12, 2014   #5
can you give some structure for task that includes more than two charts? and what i should do if they are totally different???

Single graphs
Introduction: Here you should state what the graph shows
short body paragraph: state the most important piece of information here (summary/overview)
main body paragraphs: Here you need to make comparisons and state the important features of the graphs (usually 2 paragraphs)

Double graphs
Introduction: Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g "This first bar chart shows..., and the second chart illustrates
Short body: Write 2 sentences. If the information in the charts is not connected, find one main point or general trend for each chart. If the charts are connected, try to make comparisons.

Main body paragraphs: If the two charts are completely different (e.g. a graph and a table), write a separate paragraph about each.
If the charts are the same, and show the same information (e.g. 2 pie charts), do not describe them separately, the examiner will want to see comparisons.

In this case, you could write one paragraph describing all of the information, but it is still more preferable to write two paragraphs because it makes the essay look more organized
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 12, 2014   #6
It can be clearly seen that, visitors to foreign countries dominated under the number of guests were visited the UK, while the most popular destination was accepted as France.

... Pahan just corrects my writing in the same prompt as you did. Here I wanna share to you.

Overall, the number international travel done by UK residents was far above the number of foreigners who traveled in the UK from 1979 to 1999. Further, France remained the most favourite tourist destination for English travelers in 1999.


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