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TED: How Childhood trauma affects health across a lifetime



David54 15 / 20  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
Heart disease and lung cancer are several of leading causes of death in the United States. Folks who are exposed in very high doses have triple the lifetime risk of heart disease and lung cancer. Nowdays,the exposure is not a pesticide or a chemical packaging but its because childhood trauma. Such as growing up with a parent who struggles with mental illness or substance dependence. Mostly those trauma causes by physical (physical or emotional neglect), emotional (parental mental illness), or sexual abuse (divorce; or domestic violence) and many other cases. So, The single most important thing that we need today is our responsibilities to keep our body stay healthy with always keep good relationship in neighborhood and family, especially for our children in the future. Also government role is really important and necessary to educate society in underdeveloped regions.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
Hi David, below are my thoughts on your essay.

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There you have it David, I hope the above remarks are helpful in your revision, and for future writing reference, make sure that you observe the right form of the words that you incorporate in your essay, as this is very crucial in creating a well rounded essay.


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