How much choice students should have when it comes to choosing the area of study at university

Students choice which subjects they want to study

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

People have different points of view about how much choice students should have when it comes to choosing the area of study at university. While some believe there should be only several certain of the areas like science or technology should be taught, I strongly lean towards the notion of it is the students free of right to choose their majors, the subjects they want to learn.

These days, there is an array of reasons why people think students should opt for science and technology. First, it is due to the development and technological advances which play a vital role in our life, from medical to services, or even agriculture. Therefore, scientists of computer developers are considered to have more job opportunities, career progression, higher salaries compared to the others. Moreover, it is the inventions of science and technology which contributes to our society's evolution from the Industrialization 1.0 to 4.0. Last but not least, by promoting subjects related to STEM can tighten the skills and human resources gap in those fields to accelerate the economic growth.

Nevertheless, I completely support that college students should study whatever they want. Each one has their own abilities, interests in particular aspects in their lives, you can not make a fish climb a tree, this will even worsen the social and human development. Only when you have passion for the subjects you are keen on, can you have the motivation to unleash your potentials, erase your limits in that field. Besides, we can not deny the paramount importance of other subjects like arts, history or economics which triggers the creativity of people.

In conclusion, while science and technology constitute so much to our life, I still gravitate towards the notion of students are free to select which subjects they want to study.

There is a slight misdirection in your discussion presentation. The examiner will expect to read a 5 paragraph essay composed of an accurate paraphrase, 2 public point of view discussions (one paragraph each), and then, and only then, will the personal opinion be presented. This essay is an under developed explanation that focuses on only 2 of the 3 discussion instructions. So you will scored based on a tangential response with an incorrect format. The possible score for such an essay, with the inclusion of other errors, will definitely pull you back from receiving a minimum 5 band score.

Your discussion paragraphs do not follow the suggested topic for discussion as provided in the original prompt. The suggested discussion topics, for the public point of view are:

- ...students should study whatever they like.
- ...they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Based on the way that you will be discussing these 2 public points of view, you should be able to formulate your personal opinion. Never formulate the opinion in the opening statement. It is not required nor asked for in the original discussion. Remember the clear instruction for the discussion is:

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

So the paragraph formatting is clear:

Par. 2 - Study whatever they like
Par. 3: - study future useful subjects
Par. 4: Personal opinion based on which public point of view you choose to support

The discussion topics and the presentation of the discussion in the essay can always be found in the original discussion prompt. Follow the instructions, suggested topics, and outline at all times to have a chance at a better score in the end.

Thank you so much teacher! I appreciate your feedback. I will read more discussion essay to improve. Once again, thank you