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Common Painkillers 'increase heart failure risk'



sasariri 17 / 22  
Oct 4, 2016   #1
Non-Steroidal Anti-inflammatory Drug (NSAIDs), well known as a painkiller, is a kind of drugs that used to relieve pain and inflammation. Painkiller can increase the risk of heart failure. The risk of heart failure towards people who consume NSAIDs increases by 19% than people who do not eat this drug. Researchers from UK through survey study from 10 million people from 4 countries such as UK, Netherlands, Italy and Germany, found that people aged around 65 were the highest users of painkiller. Patients should use this drug with caution, for instance, high dose usage was avoided by them and do not use it for long period. Study from BHF also revealed, painkiller is kind of drugs that has high risk of heart failure and patients who want to use painkiller should have previous discussion with their doctor, in order to avoid the worst damage. For young people who consume the painkiller regularly, their kidneys should be much concerned by them. It is essential to use it on the right occasion, for example if they have inflammation indication.

fadhilmd25 41 / 71  
Oct 4, 2016   #2
Dear Sasariri, here are some advices for your summary, feel free to correct me if I get wrong,

Is a kind of drugs that used to relieve ...

Researchers from UK through survey ... -->
Researchers from UK who conduct survey that involve samples from 10 million people in 4 different countries

high dose usage was avoided by them a... -->
The danger consumption of high doses as well as long period time

Studies conducted by BHF also revealed

Hope it helps you to improve your essay,

Regrads
fauziyahtami 22 / 36  
Oct 4, 2016   #3
Hi sari,
I do like read your summary, lemme give you some suggestion

==> ... towards people who (routinely/ often / regularly) consume NSAIDs (...) people who do not eat(consume/ use) this drug.
==> Researchers from (the) UK through survey study (...) countries such as UK (did you mean Britain or the whole UK?), Netherlands, Italy...
==> Patients should use this drug with caution(Patients who consume NSAID have to read the dosage instruction clearly),
==> for instance, high dose usage was avoided by them(Do not consume more than daily dosage) and (do not use for long period of time without doctor's supervision).

==> Study from BHF also revealed (that) painkiller is kind of (...) and patients who want to use painkiller should have previous discussion with their doctor(patient have to consult with doctor before use NSAID) , in order to avoid the worst damage(side effects) .

==> ... who consume the painkiller regularly their kidneys should be much concerned by them(should give much concern on their kidney) .
... for example, if they have inflammation indication(symptom) .

Good luck and keep writing :)
Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 34  
Oct 23, 2016   #4
Hi Sari
here some suggestions for your writing

who do not eatconsume / take this drug

were the highest users (consumers) of painkiller
Painkiller can increase the risk of heart failure . The risk of heart failure ... (You may just combine these sentence to make the reader get your point easily)

... was avoided by them and do not use it for long period (drugs or medicines are suitable if you use, consume, or take, not eat or even use)

painkiller is a kind of drugs that has

Best Regard
JCWinner 2 / 3  
Oct 23, 2016   #5
Hi sari
My suggestion for this sentences..

For young people who consume the painkiller regularly, their kidneys ...

Research findings show that regular consumption of this drug might cause kidneys failure. especially for young people. It is advisable to understand the harms and benefits.

Cheer,
JC
dils 20 / 32  
Oct 31, 2016   #6
Hi Sari,

Related with your writing here some suggestions for you.

... is a kind of drugs that is used to relieve ...

... heart failure towards the people who (...) by 19% than the people who do not eatconsume this drug.

Researchers from UK throughconducted survey study fromof10 million people ...

high dose usage was avoideddosage should avoid by them and do not useit is not allowed to use this drug for a long period.

Good luck


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