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Community service can give a sense of fullment to students


lynn731 1 / -  
Oct 25, 2013   #1
It is not uncommon for us to see that many people champion that unpaid community service should be an indispensable part of high school programmes. This trend is benefit for students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience from this.

It is apparent that this behavior for students that can gain a vast number of value life skills. With working in unpaid community service , students tend to learn how to communicate with others, how to work together, how to take responsibility by themselves . Besides , they also in a position to enhance the ability to manage time which where therefore improve the efficiency and practice the organization ability. Accordingly, by giving the indispensable unpaid community service students can have a manifold life .

Admittly , most of high school students will not be happy if they forced to join the community service without payment . I think some students who have doesn't have loaded parents are not ready for the unpaid work .In fact ,they need earn money to pay their tuition or somothers . In addition , final session students can't pay enough concentrate on their study that the community service occupy too much spare time. They need to prepare for the entrance exam which is important in their furture.

In summary ,working in community service can give a sense of fullment to students and it should be encouraged for its benefits. Nevertheless it shouldn't be necessary work with unpaid and obligation in high school programmes . If there is a real benefit both to the education of students ,and increase in welfare to society as a whole. It is a good policy , provide the hours required are not very significant. We need to find a balance point make it more better than before.

gabbie 9 / 19 3  
Oct 27, 2013   #2
It is not uncommon for us to see that many people champion that unpaid community service should be an indispensable part of high school programmes. This trend is benefit for students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience from this.

It is not uncommon for us to see that many people advocate that unpaid community services should be an indispensable part of high school programs. This certainly benefits students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience.

this behavior for students that can gain a vast number of value life skills

This behavior ? what behavior ? you can say " these extra curricular activities help students gain a vast number of social skills

Besides , they also in a position to enhance the ability to manage time which where therefore improve the efficiency and practice the organization ability

they also have chances to develop time-management skill and organizing skill

Admittly , most of high school students will not be happy if they forced to join the community service without payment

Admittedly -> However
they are forced

I think some students who have doesn't have loaded parents are not ready for the unpaid work

have doesn't have -> have not

somothers

other things

final session students can't pay enough concentrate on their study that the community service occupy too much spare time

final session students -> final year students/ senior
can't -> cannot
concentrate is verb, not noun -> students cannot concentrate on their study because the community services occupy most of their time

fullment

fulfillment

If there is a real benefit both to the education of students ,and increase in welfare to society as a whole

If..., what next ? i'm so confused what you mean

provide the hours required are not very significant

Providing the hours required is not significant

Your writing have many grammatical errors. You should check it carefully :)
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Oct 29, 2013   #3
It is not uncommon for us to see that many people champion that unpaid community service should be an indispensable part of high school programmes.

It is not uncommon for us to see that many people advocate that unpaid community services should be an indispensable part of high school programs. This certainly benefits students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience.

.... Good correction by gabbie.
However, I'd like suggest you a structure for your essay introduction that gives you a guideline to include all essential feature of your intro.
hongphuc 2 / 2  
Nov 3, 2013   #4
With working in unpaid community service , students tend to learn how to communicate with others, how to work together, how to take responsibility by themselves

By working in unpiad community services, students will be able to acknowledge the way in which people communicating with others, working together, and being responsibility by themselves .

I hope it can help you. Keep trying
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