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IELTS TASK 1 - The comparison of consumer spending in six different goods


Bayuwibowo 48 / 73 21  
Nov 27, 2015   #1
A breakdown of consumer spends in thousand pounds sterling in six different goods is presented in the bar chart. Overall, Britain lead the amount of spends among the other countries. In any case, Italy and Germany have the lowest pounds sterling expenditure one after another.

According to the data, the whole figure of Britain expend is leading and photographic film has the hugest expend among all. This is accounted more than 170,000 pounds sterling, while photographic film in Germany experience the least amount of money solely at 145,000 pounds sterling. Interestingly, all of Germany expenditure has similar figures between 140,000 pounds sterling and 150,000 pounds sterling.

The other nations, France experience the second highest for 3 products which is CDs, Toys, and Photographic film. However other goods (Personal Stereos, Tennis Racquets, and Perfumes) show the lowest expenditure in the time table. Move to Italy, this country spend more on toys rather than any other products.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Nov 27, 2015   #2
Hi Bayu, I'd like to share my thoughts on your analysis.

I'd like to add a sentence to boost your introduction.
The graph below shows the comparison of consumer expenditures on six different goods.

- A breakdown of consumer spends in thousand pounds sterling in six different goods is presented in the bar chart .
- Overall, Britain is leading the amount of
- spendsing among the other countries.
- In any case,Following is Italy and Germany have the lowest pounds sterling expenditure one after another.

Bayu, this are my remarks above and I feel like you lack a few information input on the analysis and this should be added in the essay.

You have to compare and create difference among the data that is included in the graph.

I hope I was able to help.


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