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IELTS TASK 1 - A comparison of house prices in five major cities


Bayuwibowo 48 / 73 21  
Nov 27, 2015   #1
The bar chart describe of an average house price in New York, Frankfurt, Madrid, London, and Tokyo in a 12-year period, in comparison with data in 1989. Overall, it can be seen that Frankfurt and Madrid houses price almost leveled off in the marginal percentages for over a decade. In any case, London home value experienced by far was the massive alteration from 1990 to 2002.

According to the data, this two big cities in Europe, Frankfurt and Madrid, has stable economic condition. It can be perceived from their house prices which were stable between 0% and 5 %. This is in stark contrast to the home value in Tokyo. They went down to around 7% in 1990-1995 and fell to 5% in the next years.

The most noticeable case was taken place in London city. This city experienced a considerable jump to approximately 12% in the late 2002. Following this, New York house costs also seen the same tone with London, it was accounted rising to 5% during the projection years.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 28, 2015   #2
Hi Bayu, let me help you out here. There are just some grammatical considerations that concern me in your developed essay. It is nothing major but I really hope to continue to see you progressing in terms of having a smoother use of the English language in the future. Right now, the grammar problems make your essay "choppy" at best.

The bar chart describeS of an THE average house price in New York, Frankfurt, Madrid, London, and Tokyo in OVER a 12-year period, in comparison with data in FROM 1989. Overall, it can be seen that Frankfurt and Madrid houses priceS almost leveled off in the marginal percentages for over MORE THAN a decade. In any case, London home value experienced by far was the HAD A massive PRICE alteration from 1990 to 2002.

According to the data, this THESE two big cities in Europe, Frankfurt and Madrid, has HAD A stable economic condition. It can be perceived from their STABLE house prices which were stable REFLECTED AT between 0% and 5 %. This is in stark contrast to the home value in Tokyo. They TOKYO HOME PRICES went down to BY around 7% in 1990-1995 and fell to 5% in OVER the next years.

The most noticeable case was taken place in London city. This city experienced a considerable jump to approximately 12% in the late 2002. Following this, New York house costs also seen SHOWED the same tone with TREND AS IN London, it was AND accounted FOR THE RISE rising to OF 5% during the projection PROJECTED years.


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