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Computers usage at school-level studies for children (IELTS)



shaddy 17 / 40  
Apr 8, 2013   #1
School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills.

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience


Modern technology has totally changed our approach to study. In the past, children only had option of writing with pen on paper and reading from paper-based books. Nowadays, most of the schools do not pay much attention towards the traditional way of reading and writing. This may cause some issues. I completely agree to stop computers usage at school-level studies and will propose some reasons to support my statement.

The principal reason to abandon computer usage at school-level studies is the elimination of writing skills from a child. There can be many occasions where a person do not have access to computers and if the child is unfamiliar with writing in any language without computer then consequences can be imagined. For example, a person wants to express its emotions in a written way and there is no access of computers. The situation like this may create problem for such a child as the child is not at all familiar with the structure of alphabets while writing.

Another reason is the impact of computers screen on a child's eyes while using it. It is severe in reading. As the children's eyes are very fragile, so constant radiations may harm their eyesight. Short eyesight and sometimes completely blindness are some of its examples. Constant reading and reading in unsuitable positions from computer are bad for a child's physical and mental health.

To summarize, I believe that at least in the primary schools studies children should be discouraged to use computers, as this may create a knowledge gap for writing skills and may result in bad health by reading text through computers.

OP shaddy 17 / 40  
Apr 8, 2013   #2
Hi guys,

Please review my essay, which I've posted in the above post.

Any suggestion and help would be much appreciated.

Thanks

Regards
S
Redtape 4 / 17  
Apr 8, 2013   #3
Hi Friend,

I'm also preparing for IELTS. Please see my comments below:-

" I completely agree to stop computers usage at school-level studies and will propose some reasons to support my statement." I would rather change this to

"Although computers help learning new skills I would agree to stop their usage at school level."

In my first paragraph I would like to picture more practical problem. "With the availability of various language correction packages/software there is a potential danger in near future that students don't even remember the spellings and the beauty of the language is in brink of loosing it's beauty".

Cheers,
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 12, 2013   #4
Nowadays, most of the schools do not pay much attention towards the traditional way of reading and writing methods .

I completely agree to stop computers usage at school-level studies and will propose some reasons to support my statement.

I completely agree with the argument that teachers should avoid using computers and revert back to teaching basic study skills.
Good introduction!

The principal reason to abandon computer usage at school-level studies is the elimination of writing skills from a child.

The main reason for abandoning computer usage in class rooms is the threat it imposes on basic reading and writing skills of a student.

Another reason is the impact of computers screen on a child's eyes while using it. It is severe in reading.

Another reason is that its negative impact on students' eyesight.
OP shaddy 17 / 40  
Apr 12, 2013   #5
Thanks a lot and Good luck for the exam.

They are great suggestions Sir.

I always find it hard to connect my sentences in the flow of my paragraphs. Your suggestions and correction will be a great help for me to write some good essay.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 13, 2013   #6
They are great suggestions Sir.

hey... I'm a woman :D...LOL
OP shaddy 17 / 40  
Apr 13, 2013   #7
I apologize for this. I never meant to offend you.
Redtape 4 / 17  
Apr 14, 2013   #8
Thanks a lot and Good luck for the exam.

Thank you. By the way when you are planning to appear for the test?

Cheers!!


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