Writing Task 1 - consumber spending foods, dinks, tobacco, clothing, footwear, leisure and education

consumer expenditures statistics

The table chart illustrates information on consumer expenditure on items: food, dinks, tobacco, clothing, footwear, leisure and education in five distinct countries in the year 2002

Overall, food, drinks and tobacco are the most item was spent on by the people in 5 countries. Clothing and footwear were bought most by the Italian whereas the least amount of money was spent on leisure and education in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey.

Looking at the table, it is clear that the Irish and the Turkish spent more money on food, drinks and tobacco amount of 28.91% and 32.14%. By constrast, the Italian, the Spainish and the Turkish expenditure on food, drinks and tobacco account for 16.36%, 18.80% and 15.77%.

In terms of clothing and footwear, the Italian spent more money on this about 9.00%. On the other hand, the Turkish, the Irish and the Spainish made up 6.63%, 6.43% and 6.51%. The least amount of money was spent on clothing and footwear by Swedish people.

Finally, neither of countries spent more than 5% on leisure and education. The largest amount of money expenditure on leisure and education by the Turkish with regards to 4.35%

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  Table chart
  

The summary overview is incomplete as it does not present the measurement used and a listing of the 5 distinct countries. These must be presented as a part of the summary as it will help illustrate the trending statement for the overall review. Be careful of your punctuation marks. You forgot to use a full stop at the end of the second sentence in your summary overview.

The major problem of this report is in the paragraph formatting. You have focused on the quick presentation of the information rather than the proper formatting of the information presentation. You are scored on the formatting requirements. That means, you have to:

- Present at least 3 sentences per paragraph, no more than 5
- Avoid the use of run-on sentences
- Ensure the clarity of the information presentation per paragraph

These are the 3 major errors that exist in your presentation that you should correct the next time you ask for an essay review here. There is a lack of clear and coherent presentation in your paragraph due to the shortness of each paragraph presentation. Do not rush through the essay. Perform an actual analysis. Try to show your grammar range by discussing the information rather than simply doing presentations with little developed comparison points. Although your sentences are truly long, since they are run-on sentences, these do not really help to increase your LR or GRA score.

@Holt
Thank you for your help, I will fix it