A controversial issue about how to give the punishments to perpetrators.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.

There is a controvercial issue about how to give the punishments to perpetrators. Some people think that every crime have to be punished in accordance to the regulations. In contrast, others believe that the consideration of the crime background is an important aspect when making a punishment. Personally, every crime that happened should be investigated before giving a judgement. Because every people deserve to get a justice

Regarding to human rights, we have to find out the motivation of criminals when commit a crime before giving a punishment. For instance, husband killed his sister-in-law when he came to her house. Due to the accident, he must get into the prison. But, when police look out the reason why he did it, they found that he has a mental illness. Automatically, He cannot get the fixed punishment based on the type of crime that he did

On the other hand, others who believe that every crime should be punished based on applicable law, did not care about themotivation of the crime. Every person who did the same crime, must be justice as a standard punishment. For instance, the penalty of the every killer who planned its murder is 20 years in prison. So, every teenagers or adults does not matter. They have to convicted in the same way

All in all, i personally think that each crime should be investigated specifically and should be punished according to the appropriate judgement. We have to consider the reason why they commit crimes because it is the human rights. However, the judgement should be held righteously.

hi miss @ifraanisa05, allow me to give you some corrections :)

There is a controvercia l=>CONTROVERSIAL issue about how to ...
... every crime have=> HAS to be punished in accordance to =>WITH the regulations.
... before giving a judgement => JUDGMENT.

... motivation of criminals when commit =>COMITTING a crime before ...

For instance, the penalty of =>FOR the every killer ...
So, every teenagers or adults =>ADULT does not matter. They have to convicted =>CONVICT in the same way

GOOD LUCK :)

Ifra, you would not score better than a 4 with this essay. While you did attempt to discuss the prompt in the best way that you could, you just failed to keep track of the discussion so that you could present the discussion points in a clear, coherent, and acceptable manner. You have difficulty in developing proper paragraph sentences because you lose sight of the all too important topic sentences that dictate the discussion tone of the paragraph. You must also learn to spellcheck because you have a number of misspelled words in the essay that, while it doesn't affect what you are trying to say, since the reader can guess the correct word, distracts from the true meaning of what you are trying to convey to the reader. I hope that you will be able to take note of the problem areas I pointed out. I am looking forward to your next, improved essay very soon.