In some countries, men and women are having children late in life. Indicate the causes and effects.

In some countries around the world, men and women are having children late in life, what are the reasons for this development?

What are the effects on society and family life?

It is not uncommon these days for couples to have children late in life. This poses a threat to the world population and can possibly damage the countries' economy and national security. In my point of view, this inevitable trend happens due to the recent rapid economic development.

It seems to me that some married couples are not ready to be parents because they have a lack of parenting skills or face financial pressure. To get ahead of this relentlessly changing world, it takes people's fierce wills and, as a matter of fact, having children could possibly obstruct the course of their success. They would not have time to care for their children and then it leads to their struggle with work-life balance.

An additional reason is that it is a challenge to find a true soul nowadays. In process of globalization, people seemingly have different views about all kinds of things like politics, social problems with which others do not match. Some people have thought that marriage is one of the most important milestones in life. Thus, it would take them a long time to find a suitable partner.

While a large proportion of men and women decide to have children late, this trend causes detrimental effects on society and family life. World population aging is a case in point. It causes a shortage of younger laborers that slows the economic growth. Moreover, the lack of young people in national services plagues the countries' safety. Family life is not an exception. The later people decide to have children, the bigger the age gap between parents and children is. Parents will have a more difficult time harmonizing with their children due to one's perspective differences.

- The essence of the sentence is correct, but the reference point is wrong. It is not "couples" that is referred to in the original, it is "some countries around the world". Therefore, your reference point should be a synonym of the same such as "Internationally, couples are..." or "There is a global trend of..." to name a few replacement references for the phrase.

Good work on your direct responses to the questions. These relevant topic references have clearly shown the examiner that you understood the questions, and will be discussing relevant subjects in the reasoning paragraphs. These will definitely help your TA and C&C scores.

Since you are being asked for your personal reference points, then you did a good job in using first person pronouns to clearly indicate your opinion. A general discussion would have worked, without reference to pronouns, but that would have lessened the impact and clarity of your discussion presentation. This way, the presentation remains cohesive based on the fact that you are making it clear that you are the speaker in the presentation.

This is missing a concluding paragraph. The presentation is open ended. The last paragraph is not an appropriate summary conclusion. Rather, it is an expanded discussion of your personal opinion. The essay would have been better had you decided to not write paragraph 3 anymore, since it is only an addendum to the previous paragraph, which already responded to the question. Instead, the current last paragraph appropriately responds to the second question, thus making the essay more cohesive and offering you a chance to write a more applicable reverse paraphrase.