The prompt restatement iss acceptable. However, the extent Uspouse clarity was affected by the improper sentence structure:
I completely agree with the opinion is that there is that there should be no restrictions given to artisans by the government.
This is a redundancy that shows the writer is not looking out for less C + C deductions. It actually shows a lack of care for thought clarity in the presentation. The writer could have had a strong base score if not for that sentence formation error.
In the first reasoning paragraph. The writer presents a valid opinion that would have been made more valid by a solid reference to say, the author's own experience or public knowledge , represented by the mention of a specific country. This falls under the personal knowledge, experience, or public knowledge discussion basis requirement of the writing instruction.
In the second reasoning presentation, there should be a specific reference to the artists of modern masterpieces Be they local or international artists, these are names of public knowledge in the field.
sThe essay digresses from its point by presenting the usrequired Ind paragraph. As that opposes the actual opinion, it will be disregarded in the scoring process. As a single . essay, this must contain no more than 4 paragraphs. Both reasoning paragraphs must strengthen the opinion focus of the essay. If not for the unnecessary 3rd (opposing) reason, this would have been a positively solid scoring presentation.