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Creative artists should be given the freedom to express - 'range of limitation'


fahadbd 25 / 56 5  
Aug 15, 2013   #1
Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own idea (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish.

In the progress of thought, many people embark on varieties of fields. It is nowadays well known subject to create pictures, music or film but how much freedom is entitled by the government ? The issue in my writing for free-express idea in the field of creative arts. However, in my opinion freely express should have a range of limitation.

It is a fact, when freeness comes around that everyone selects the way of disuse. Manually, an artist innovates whatever he or she wishes that is called freedom of expression. Moreover, different people have different choices , artists are not exceptional. They can sometimes create art which may affect in society or culture even to the young star. For example, teenagers are naturally influenced by the bad film or picture, so such type of film creation can be harmful for the country. A legal action rather than free voice is the best approach for a government.

In addition, listening music is most interesting habit to all classes of people. Apart from the negative side, artists can keep traditional culture by making attractive music on native culture. Is this sense, they are the wealth of a nation. Many historical books are taught as an academic lesson in school or college. If artists have more freedom in terms of writing may be encouraged of their creativity in art fields.

In conclusion, due to the increase of excessive freely art may cause a dangerous impact on every spare of the country. I strongly believe that creative artists are to be valued and will have free voice in crucial writing.

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faheddarmoch 4 / 5  
Aug 15, 2013   #2
great wriring. But, I would say if you support your paragraph with some examples, you will be granted a full mark.

good luck
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 16, 2013   #3
In the progress of thought, many people embark on varieties of fields. It is nowadays well known subject to create pictures, music or film but how much freedom is entitled by the government ? The issue in my writing for free-express idea in the field of creative arts. However, in my opinion freely express should have a range of limitation.

Well.... I don't say that your writing is bad, but I think you need to improve clarity of your sentences and also the flow of ideas. I suggest you to follow this structure for the introduction.
bkim2468 2 / 4  
Aug 18, 2013   #4
Although I like the wording of this essay, I'm not sure whether this is for a college application or not. If it is, then I would advise making transitions less like a formal essay and more fluid like a narrative of some sort.
ygcantu0496 2 / 10 1  
Aug 18, 2013   #5
However, in my opinion freely express should have a range of limitation

Follow that by answering how or what should the limit be?
Dreqc 2 / 7 1  
Aug 18, 2013   #6
"In the progress of thought, many people embark on varieties of fields. It is nowadays well known subject to create pictures, music or film but how much freedom is entitled by the government ?"

awesome opening sentence really buddy u inspired :)

2), what do u mean by this line "The issue in my writing for free-express idea" instead of this you could aim for a broader perspective and for "free- express idea" you could use freedom of expression

3 ) "due to the increase of excessive freely art " this does not make sense
as excessive is also another word for increase

4) a dangerous impact on every spare of the country? how no reasons or eg

to conclude please give more example and reasons after writing questions :)
me4mbd 5 / 11 5  
Aug 18, 2013   #7
It is nowadays well known subject to create pictures, music or film but how much freedom is entitled by the government ?

From my experience I know that most of the IELTS examiners do not like question mark in the answer paper. You could paraphrased like this... undoubtedly creation of pictures, musics or films are well known subjects nowadays, however, a question has arisen whether this creative activities should entitled by government or not .

In the progress of thought, many people embark on varieties of fields.

Apart from the negative side , artists can keep traditional culture by making attractive music on native culture.

You have nice expression in your essay. Examiners like these...keep it up :)


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