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IELTS: Customs and behaviours followed by tourists or host should welcome.


Inkjet 2 / 8 1  
Jun 5, 2014   #1
This is my first thread to EssayForum, your comments will be highly appreciated, Please mention the IELTS Band based on your judgment.

Tourism has been flourishing for the last few years. Tourists from different country and culture are travelling to other countries. Age old traditions of locals and their manners are highly evaluated by every nation. Meanwhile, the new concepts and cultural views carried by tourists can also be accepted by host countries to enrich cultural diversity. For my understanding, tourism can be an excellent mood of cultural exchange between both sides.

Ancient cultures, national believes and social behaviours of every nation make them unique from others. Every country will try their utmost to protect their individuality and identity. For an example, Chinese are treated as an especial nation having rich old cultural background. Their traditional festivals, songs, form of dancing, language or foods have own style which gives a proud feeling for all Chinese. So tourists visiting any other country should respect local customs and behaviour. This is also a great opportunity for the host to display their cultural beauty to the visitors. Thus their concepts and manners will be carried throughout the world.

On the other hand, travellers can also represent themselves along with their cultures to the host country. Fashions, dresses or special behaviours of tourists are often attracted by the locals. It is said that people outside his country is an ambassador. Tourists should utilize every chance of branding his cultures and customs. As an instant, traveller from west can deliver their culture when visiting east. Visitors can share experience, tell gossip about their national achievements, spread their eating habits, languages, festivals to host country people. The host country should appreciate overseas values and cultures to enlighten their own cultures.

Eventually, in the age of globalization we cannot restrict cultural mobility. My opinion is to accept and spread variety of customs and manners in every corner of the world. And tourism has a great role to build a multicultural world.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 6, 2014   #2
EventuallyIn conclusion , in the age of globalization era we cannot restrict cultural mobility. My opinion is to accept and spread variety of customs and manners in every corner of the world. AndTry to avoid starting a sentence with "and") tourism has a great role to build a multicultural world.

I do not score your work because of two reasons. First of all, I'm not an examiner, second of all, you do not need a score, what you need is practicing and improving your writing skill as mush as possible. Forget about score at this stage. You need to improve your vocabulary as well. Try to read different texts with various topics. In this way, you can ameliorate your writing and reading skills at the same time.

Wish you all the best my friend.
Cheers,
Ahmad
OP Inkjet 2 / 8 1  
Jun 6, 2014   #3
Dear Ahmed, take my salam first. A lot of thanks for your time and suggestions. It will definitely improve my writing.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 6, 2014   #4
Dear Ahmed, take my salam first.

Salam :)
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Jun 7, 2014   #5
put the task, please! it will be easier for the readers to know what type of your essay is..also, you should put space between paragraphs to make your essay more interesting to read and easier to catch your points,
OP Inkjet 2 / 8 1  
Jun 7, 2014   #6
put the task, please!

You mean "Writing Task 2" should also be highlighted? Your advice will be followed in coming threads. Thank you.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 7, 2014   #7
You mean "Writing Task 2" should also be highlighted?

No, what's the topic of your essay? Is that an "agree or disagree" one? Does the prompt ask you to discuss two viewpoints? Does the topic ask to write about advantages & disadvantages of sth?
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 1, 2014   #8
This is my first thread to EssayForum, your comments will be highly appreciated, Please mention the IELTS Band based on your judgment.

Ok .... the first thing I want to ask you is to include the prompt in the post. It helps us get an understanding about what it really requires from you :) It is anyway difficult to provide you with meaningful comments when we do not understand the prompt fully :(

ForIn my understanding, tourism can be an excellent mood of cultural exchangeunderstanding between both sides.the hosts and guests.


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