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Dating with schizophrenia - an experience about living with this condition


Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
This summary is extracted from an article published on the New york time, on June 2015. The original title is " Dating with schizophrenia".

Michael Hedrick shared his experience about living with woman who suffer schizophrenia. Hedrick is a writer in Boulder, Colo. His love story began through the soul mate website called match.com. He made a long conversation with the girl he finally loved after they meet. Actually Hedrick is a kind of man who is easily to fall in love. Although this memorable relationship should be ended due to the fact that Hedrick was paranoid of being insulted by other people. He states that the biggest difficulty living with schizophrenia is a rather crazy feeling that comes from his paranoia, moreover when he also gets too much pressure about his job, it supports him feel more stressful. Now, Hedrick prefer to be 'mantra', a kind of person who do not chase any girl but just stay cool to impress the right girl.
Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hey Chaca....
You've done a great job, these following corrections are subjected to you :

MichaelHedrick,writer in Boulder, Colo, shared his experience ... Hedrick is a . His love story began through the soulmate's website ...
... he finally loved after they me et.
Although this their memorable relationship (It is better if you change this into "their" possession ) should be ended due to (...) by other people (may you need sometimes to change common word into less common "sorrounding/college/peers etc." ).

... biggest difficulty living with woman suffering schizophrenia is a rather crazy feeling ...

Note
It is please to correct your essay, your writing easy to understand and great


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