Dear John, look after my house and pet - IELTS letter

Need Help:

I am appearing for IELTS test and need feedback about my writing. So, can you please provide some feedback.

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

- give contact details for which you are away
- give instructions about how to care for your pet
- describe other household duties

Dear John,

I am so happy that you are ready to look after my house and pet while I am away on holiday for two weeks. In the case of emergency you can call me in the hotel where I am staying and the number is +610430919454. Else, you can even ring to my cousin Chris whose number is +977043092343.

One of the big black dog is having problem with the right leg so you need to give medicine and you can find it in the drawer of store room. And, others need shower after every two days, hope you won't mind doing it.

In the kitchen, there is a rubbish bag, which you need to put outside of the house as a result municipality can take it away on Monday morning. The other important thing is paying the electricity bill for the month of June. There is money on top of the fridge along with the electricity bill.

I really appreciate your help and co-operation.

Warm regards,
Merry Smith

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One of the big black dogs is having a problem with the right leg so you need to give him medicine and you can find it in the drawer of store room. AndBesides , the others need shower ...

which you need to put outside of the house as a resultso that the municipality can take it away

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I am so happy that you are ready toagreed to look after my house and pet while I am away on holiday for two weeks.

i am so happy that, your are agreed to look after my house and pet while i will be away for two weeks.
Rubbish bags are need to put away on Sunday night, because Council truck normally comes on Monday morning.

The other important thing is to pay an electricity bill for the month of June, i will put the due amount next to electricity bill on the top of fridge in kitchen room.

your cooperation and help in this matter will be highly appreciated.

Thank you everybody for such a valuable feedback. Do anybody have idea about the IELTS grade for this letter ?

You have posted your essay about advertisement in my thread but while i was writing my comments to help you you had already deleted your the essay there.

I think that probably my recommendation and corrections would be helpful somehow. But i do not know how to send them to you and i am posting them here.





it is better to avoid repeating. how about these? "which benefit our lives" or "it make our lives happier and easier" or "it makes our lives better and comfortable"

I think that conclusion is too short. I guess it must be three sentences.
you wrote there: "advertisement is ...the information desk,..." then "people know..." , and it is correct and you sum up the advertisement's benefits in general, overall and logically you have to say something like "I believe..." or "from my opinion..". You should restate or emphasize your personal viewpoint again.

Good luck!

Thank you very much for your feedback. It is very helpful for me to correct my writing.

if this is an informal writing, I think you need to write the receiver's address at the upper right corner.

You can say ---- I can be reached at (contact number)

Thanks Vivian.

Hi Vivian,
I doubt about the receiver's address as you have mentioned. I think there is no need to write address in IELTS letter.

Hiren, yes you're right. There is no need to write address in IELTS letter.