Dear,
I will be taking the California Basic Educational Skills Test (CBEST) in August. Can you kindly check the essay and provide some feedback and tips on these kinds of topic for me? It'd be nice if you can also give me a score based on the CBEST grading criteria. :) Thank you very much!!
Describe a particular time in your life when you had difficulty making an important decision. Identify the situation and explain whether you were able to resolve the problem. If it was resolved, how? If not, why not- what happened?
We are all making choices and decisions in everyday life; however, good ones lead you on the right path while bad ones bring you in the middle of nowhere. Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision I've ever made would definitely be getting into college. In my country, our educational system is a bit different from that of the United States. First, we are ...
We are all making choices and taking decisions in everyday our life;
Throughout my entire life
our educational system is a bit different from that of the United States
we have two means to be admitted to a the college.
We'll take the first test in May First exam conducts in May and second is in July.
First attempt, we can apply to schools in which we want to get, it's similar to the SAT. If we failed to get into any colleges in first exam , we could still take the second round in July, which we will be allocated based on the test results
might be more correction ahead ...
We are all making choices and decisions in everyday life; however, good ones lead us on the right path while bad ones bring us in the middle of nowhere. Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision that I've ever made would definitely be getting into college. In my country, our educational system is a bit different from that of the United States. First, we are required to choose our major before getting into college. Second, we have two means to be admitted to a college. We take the first test in May, and apply to schools in which we want to get into , its similar to the SAT. However , if we fail to get into any colleges, we could still take the second round in July, which will be allocated to us based on the test results. These are some of the reasons that give rise to the hesitant decision.(what decision?)
I've dreamed of getting into the National Taiwan University since middle school, which is the best university in my country. Due to a Since, I have a great passion in learning languages , I aspire to take up foreign language as for my future major. However, things didn't turn out as what I've been expecting I had expected, when I got the admission letter from my current department office.(I think, you should rearrange this statement) I was admitted to National Taiwan Normal University, a school for teachers; meanwhile, I have been teaching Chinese as a second language. Everyone else in my life seemed delighted upon hearing the news, but not me. The aforementioned reasons are not the only ones that block me from the joy. I wasn't satisfied with the location of my school, to be more precise, I made up my mind that I'm definitely going to my school when I was on my way to the interview. (your school?..this is confusing...and which interview?)Besides, I never thought of being a teacher in the future.
I considered taking the second round in July; however, after several long consultations with my teachers, I decided to face this ironic result. Based on the previous simulated tests, my grades were not good enough that they could to guarantee me admission into my dream college. Also, chances are that I might even end up on going to private schools, which cost more and the reputations are not as good as the school that offers me the opportunity now. (Take care of the tense) In terms of the location, its relatively closer to the capital city of my country than most of the schools I might end up going if I took the second round test.(Tense!)
From dissatisfaction to great content, I am truly grateful for my teachers' and parents' advice. Not only do I enjoy my current major, but I am also pursuingget a double major in English, just as what I've been dreaming of since childhood. I learned a lot throughout the whole process, especially with consulting to the elders, making decisions inon my own, and taking responsibility. I didn't realize how experienced those elders are until then. I am fortunate to have their support all the way on making this once-in-a-lifetime decision. Moreover, it's time for me to grow up and get out of the comfort zone that I've been in for long . This is a decision that affects my future in certain degree for I have to be responsible for the result.(I didnt get this statement)
At last, the problem was solved. Furthermore, I am going to be a sophomore in the field of teaching Chinese as a second language as well as English Literature. As with the everyday saying, "You will never know unless you go for it." Although being a teacher wasn't part of my plan initially, I've gained a lot throughout helping foreign friends with better understanding in Chinese. Therefore, I am not regretted regretting for the road that I did not take. "It's not hard to make decisions when you know what your values are." In short, I know where I am now, and I believe I'll succeed as long as I set my mind on it.
I really liked this example, that you have provided! Many of us have faced such circumstances...and I really liked what happened with you, in the end.
Well, according to me...you should take care of the tenses!...at times, they could change the meaning of the sentences, literally. Also, I think, you should take care of the continuation of sentences. If you cannot fit in your ideas into a single statement, break it into two...rather than using commas. Thanks!
...while bad ones bring us into the middle of nowhere.
Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision that I've ever made would definitely be getting into college. --- why was this a hard decision? A hard decision is when you need to choose between 2 things and you don't know what to choose.
I think Silkesha wanted to know, too, the same thing I want to know... what is the difficult decision you had to make? At the end of the first para, give a sentence that makes the reader know exactly what decision you are talking about.
:-)