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Task 1- The Develoment in Eastminster from 1999 to 2009



Lita27 16 / 13  
Mar 14, 2016   #1
An illustration of the development in the Eastminster over a decade, from 1999 to 2009, is depicted in the presented maps. Overall, it can be seen that several new buildings were constructed on the southeast side of this town during a 10-year period, while across the river, on the northwest side, several business sectors were also established.

Looking at the southeast side, private houses were reduced tremendously which were altered to be apartment blocks. The hospital and small shops remained unchanged alongside the river. Similarly, railway station still settled on the west of the town. Unfortunately, the school was relocated and replaced by shopping line, and the replacement of public garden into factories and warehouses made this urbanised area.

In the northwest position, Woodland was developed into Adventure Park. It is noticeable houses in this neighbourhood became larger, while the park adjacent to them became less spacious than those in the past ten years. A particular distinction has been noted, it was a hotel featured with golf field standing in place of a mansion with gardens. A new school also has been built next to the hotel.


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justivy03 - / 2265  
Mar 15, 2016   #2
Hi Lita, after reading and understanding your analysis, I must say uou did quiet a good job, the analysis is clean, accurate and the words you use to depict the illustration is by far the most comprehensive descrition I have read.

I just have a few words that you might want to consider, use "over the course of a 10 year period", instead of "during a 10 year period", I suggest this because it is more appropriate to the sentence and the overall picture of the essay.

Furthermore, as I mentioned, the overall essay os written well, however, you have to be very careful when it comes to the accuracy of the information of your analysis. I hope my insights help in your revision as well as with your future writing references.


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