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IELTS: The development of a coastal village


MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
May 21, 2013   #1
The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagrams depicts the transformation of an European coastal village into a huge tourist resort from 1974 to 2004. Overall, there was a dramatic increase in the population, rising from 12000 in 1974 to 130000 with tourists combined.

Unlike other nearby regions, the original fishing village remained intact in 2004, with further extension at the back for the local people to reside. Meanwhile, the harbour adjacent to the village was replaced by the sandy beach. Along the coastline that was nearly empty in 1974 located many newly constructed hotels. Besides, the small plot of land which used to grow olives was converted into a larger farmland with the aim of providing fruit and vegetables for the visitors.

On the upper side of the hills, 2 scattered villages developed into densely-populated ones, along with shops built to attract customers. The infrastructure was also enhanced by a long road linked to the coast.



Habib Rastegar 8 / 18 1  
May 22, 2013   #2
The given diagrams depicts

The given diagrams depict

The given diagrams depicts the transformation of an European coastal village into a huge tourist resort from 1974 to 2004

The given diagrams depicts the transformation [process] of an European coastal village into a huge tourist resort from 1974 to 2004

Along the coastline that was nearly empty in 1974 located many newly constructed hotels

Along the coastline that was nearly empty in 1974, now, however, many newly constructed hotels are located

The variety of the words are excellent and the sentences structures are very good
Please make short your phrases to allow the readers to follow you in the essay
Best,
Helio 2 / 2 1  
May 24, 2013   #3
your vocabulary is quite good but the sentences are a bit confusing because of their length.


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