Ielts - The Diagram shows the process of using water to produce electricity.

The energy from the sun heats the earths surface. The heated water turns into vapour in a process labelled as evaporation in the diagram. Water vapour accumulates to form clouds. When the concentration of water vapour increases the density of the clouds it becomes heavy which results in rain.

The water from the rainfall is collected in huge reservoirs. Theses reservoirs are able to hold back huge amounts of water by constructing strong barriers called dams. Water from the reservoirs is directed to the turbines to generate electricity. The flow of water is controlled by strong valves. The water from the turbines is recycled and pumped back into the reservoirs. The electricity produced in these turbines is supplied to transformer stations through high voltage cables. This electricity is evenly distributed to houses, factories, schools and hospitals via underground cables.

Firstly you need to use minimum 150 words and your essay has only 139 words.
Please rephrase some of your sentences to make them grammatically correct.


turns into vapour and this process is labelled as


water vapour increases, the cloud's density also increases making them heavy, causing it to burst in rain


hold back huge amounts of water because of construction of strong barriers called dams.. reprashae the above sentence also.

Also try to give a overall conclusion for the above topic. Dont end it abruptly like above just give it a smooth ending like, thus from the above diagrmas we can see that ...

something like that

best,
sharman

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In this kind of task, you should write an introduction to state what the diagram illustrate. Then you should provide an overview to describe its main trends.