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IELTS: Doing same things vs Making change - Which is good?



Dinhlan 2 / 2  
May 25, 2014   #1
Topic: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Dicuss both view and give your opinion.

Some of us may define change as challenge. Accepting challenges means taking risk. Thus, some will encouter and overcome it regardless the result. However, some may evade facing it and stay secure. Before expressing my opinion on this matter, It is necessary to look at boths sites carefully.

To be able to adapt changes, we take in to account that it would affect our lives positively or even negatively. Nonetheless, no pain, no gain, Changes bring opporturnities to examine our ability of dealing with difficulties and do thing differently. Regardless what the outcome might be, we find out our weaknesses and lack, and from that we complete ourself. More importantly, it is definitely significant lesson and experience in our lifetime. Steve Jobs and Bill Gates are those living role model of changing mind set and common routine to pursuit their ambitious. They dropped out from in the middle of college and started working their own projects meanwhile their contemporary students had tried to finish studying and then find a job. And as we all know, they are now the most well know billionare all over the world.

In contrast, some people maintain their lives steady. They realise that they are sastified with their current condition. And it is not necsseary to make changes which would mess

up their regular living. I once asked my uncle, who has been working the same job for 20 years, about moving to other city for better job and higher salary. He simply answered " If I move to other city, it will cause inconveniences to my childrens to get familiar with new invironment and also interupt their upbringing".

Change is obviously natural, each of us have own way to confront. However, as a youth, I consider changes as sources of improvement in order to moving forward and earning new experience. Nevertheless, by accepting challenges, we gain more than we lose.

Hung Arsenal 3 / 2  
May 26, 2014   #2
More importantly, it is definitely significant lesson and experience in our lifetime --> they are could be perceived as significant lessons and experiences for our lifetime

Steve Jobs and Bill Gates are those living role model of changing mind set and common routine to pursuit their ambitious --> Steve Jobs and Bill Gates are contemporary typical role-models of changing mind set and common routine to pursuit their ambitions / goals/objectives

while their friends were striving for studying in the colleges/universities, both had choosen a different path: started working on their own projects. the result is well-know, they are now on top of famous billionaires in the world.

In contrast, some people maintain their steady lives to avoid any changes could leave a mess to their current condition

I once asked my uncle, who has been working the same job for 20 years, about moving to other city for better job and higher salary. He simply answered " If I move to other city, it will cause inconveniences to my childrens to get familiar with new invironment and also interupt their upbringing".

--> actually, as far as I know, we should not provide this kind of personal example in ielts task 2. However, I think we can modify as below

My uncle, for instance, is the best example represents this behaviour. He's refuted changing his 20 years-job to have a higher salary just to stay away from any inconveniences as well as foreseeable working environmental conflicts, which may interupt their upbringing

Obviously, changes are natural and each of us have distinct way to confront. However, as a young man, I consider changes as sources of improvement for moving forward and earning new experiences. It means we gain more than we lose.
dumi 1 / 6793  
May 29, 2014   #3
Some of us may define change as challenge

... good hook :)

AcceptingTaking up challenges means taking more risk. ThusHowever, some will encouterwillingly look forward to encountering change and overcome itregardlessgiving less consideration about what sort of outcome they may bring the result.

Before expressing my opinion on this matter, It is necessary to look at boths sites carefully.

.... I think it would be more interesting for the reader to learn your opinion at this point. This sentence sounds a bit too vague :(
fikri 5 / 310  
Jun 12, 2014   #4
please, put space between paragraphs to show their differences
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 12, 2014   #5
hlan]Some of us may define change as challenge. Accepting challenges means taking risk. Thus, some will encouter and overcome it regardless the result. However, some may evade facing it and stay secure. Before expressing my opinion on this matter, It is necessary to look at boths sites carefully

Well, you seem to be going a little bit out of topic. Your topic is about how people perceive change and in the introduction you need to stick to the main idea. You better change your approach a little bit;

Change can be challenging. Some people do not appreciate change as they are scared of facing the risks involved with such challenges. However, others welcome change and think such changes would bring them more opportunities for life.


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