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"When and Where"; doing work by hand or using machines?



kperera 1 / 1  
Oct 5, 2010   #1
Can someone edit or give feedback for my essay Please....

Depending on the skills and talents each person has,working with the machines can be a choice of preference.People in early age may have prefer their own manual way of working due to their viability.As the science and technology has become an essential part of some human lives.I prefer working with machines due to its advantages even though there are some bad consequences as well.

Machines makes life easier.It is a way of saving time and to get more productivity too.When there is a way of getting done the work in an easy way why do someone waste time?

Another reason which I see is working with machines may help to stay away from illnesses like stress.As we see the workload someone has can be release by machines,so it prevent someone by getting sick of stress as the machines give the solution for each and every problem.

When comparing the figures,the productivity and the quality of work is more admirable of machines.
The efficacy of machines is higher than the manual work,what cause for that is the inventions of new technologies has given out most successful results with the machineries.

Although we can argue about both advantages and disadvantages,depending entirely on machineries can not be wise.As each and every fact has both good and bad circumstances,considering those we should use our knowledge to use it When and Where it suites other than depending totally on machines..

mea505 - / 265  
Oct 5, 2010   #2
Hi!
I see that someone else has already made some corrections for you, and I don't want to repeat them here, but there are a few others that I would like to draw you towards...

And, there are some sentences towards the end of the essay that simply do not make a lot of sense, and it is difficult for me to wrap my mind around them. This is stated later.

I would try to re-write the essay so that it makes more sense. Try to use the corrections above and in this paragraph as a guide when you are re-writing the essay. Then, you can re-post it on the forum.

Cheers!
OP kperera 1 / 1  
Oct 6, 2010   #3
Thanks for the corrections


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