Driving to shop in large urban malls instead of driving to small town-center retailers

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Shopping location preferences

There is an increasing preference for driving to shop in large urban malls instead of driving to small town-center retailers. This leads to a number of consequences, including a rise in cars. Although there are some benefits of this trend, I would argue that there are far more drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are a number of advantages of driving to large out-of-town stores. To begin with, shopping in city-suburban relieve pressure on housing supply systems. This is because shopping at out-of-town stores encourages people to move to out-of-town areas for living. To illustrate, Ho Chi Minh city is faced with overpopulation so when these citizens moved to other suburban places such as the Nha Be district will reduce the number of people living in the central of the city. In addition, the air pollution will reduce when there are fewer cars in city centers. In Ho Chi Minh city, when people move to Cu Chi for shopping, the gases from the exhaust will decrease in District 1.

On the other hand, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks. Firstly, local people will be put into inconvenience since they are difficult in traveling to a distant place to shop. For example, a lot of people living in District 6 do not have their private cars and it seems to be long-distance when they want to buy something at Dau Moi Market in Hoc Mon or Cu Chi. Secondly, driving to large out-of-town stores increase the unemployment rate in the local area because more malls will be located at other ot-of-town stores. When more stores open in out-of-town areas, these employers want to recruit their employees who live in nearer places in order to convenience in works. It might cause to unbalance career rate in that city.

In conclusion, while I recognized the possible advantages of this trend, I believe these advantages are overshadowed by the disadvantages of the aforementioned arguments.

The essay will automatically receive a failing score because of 2 reasons:
- Prompt deviation
- Response is unrelated to the task

This is a 5 paragraph essay that should have provided 3 paragraph explanations based on 3 provided questions:
- What is the advantage of shopping in a shopping center?
- What is the advantage of shopping in a local market?
- What is your preference?

The author clearly wrote a response that does not apply to the provided oqquestions. Therefore, this essay was an exercise in futility. It was marked to fail the minute the essay responded with:


The clear misunderstanding of the writing requirement and how to respond to it shows the degree by which the writer does not understand the English language.