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Eastern countries; Should artists always be given the freedom to express ideas?


nguyenannhon 5 / 2  
Nov 26, 2007   #1
Dear all,
Please help me to correct my essay about this topic.
Thank you very much for your help,
Nhon

Topic:
Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option?

Essay:
Nowadays, artists have received much more freedom than the previous generation had. However, some creative artists still request the government to relax the limit in order to help them to create more beautiful works. In my opinion, the governments should base on the cultures of their countries to modify the rules.

In Western countries, freedom is always put to top so the artists can express their own ideas in whichever they wish. As a result of this, there are many beautiful nude pictures and movies have been composed and widely accepted by most people in the world. However, freedom is also exploited by many bad artists to create a lot of non-value sexy products. To avoid this, I think the government should make the rules to distinguish between a beautiful work and a sexy one.

Conversely, Eastern countries, where there are many restrictions about arts, it is very difficult for artists to express their creative ideas to the movies and pictures. For example, many pictures about the beauty of women are strictly prohibited in Arab world. Since our world is changing day to day, I think those governments should relax the rules to help us to have more beautiful works about the Arab world.

In particularly, Vietnam has changed a lot and we are going to have the first nude exhibitions of Thai Phien, who has composed a great number of pictures related to Vietnamese women. After this exhibition, Vietnamese may change their views about nude pictures.

To sum up, I think any freedom has it own limit so the government should define the restrictions for the works of artists. Furthermore, these rules should be made based on the culture of each country because everyone, every country has a different view about the beauty.

EF_Team2 1 / 1,709  
Nov 26, 2007   #2
Greetings!

You've written a good essay! Here are some suggestions for you:

In my opinion, governments should base their policies on the cultures of their countries to modify the rules.

In Western countries, freedom is always put at the top so the artists can express their own ideas in whichever way they wish. As a result of this, there are many beautiful nude pictures and movies that have been composed and widely accepted by most people in the world. However, freedom is also exploited by many bad artists to create a lot of valueless, sexually explicit products. To avoid this, I think the government should make the rules to distinguish between a beautiful work and a sexy one. [What about things which are both beautiful and sexy?]

Conversely, in Eastern countries, where there are many restrictions about the arts, it is very difficult for artists to express their creative ideas in movies and pictures. For example, many pictures about the beauty of women are strictly prohibited in the Arab world.

In particular, Vietnam has changed a lot and we are going to have the first nude exhibitions of Thai Phien, who has composed a great number of pictures related to Vietnamese women.

To sum up, I think any freedom has it own limits, so the government should define the restrictions for the works of artists. Furthermore, these rules should be made based on the culture of each country because everyone, every country, has a different view about beauty.

Keep up the good work!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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