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Education comes not from books but from practical experience. (MCAT)



flavia03 7 / 9  
Jul 12, 2010   #1
Here is the full prompt of the above statement.

Write a unified essay in which you perform the following tasks. Explain what you think the above statement means. Describe a specific situation in which books might educate students better than practical experience. Discuss what you think determines when practical experience provides a better education than books do.

Please let me know it is coherent, flows well, and answers the question. In addition, how can I improve my writing.

Thank you, and here is my essay!

For centuries an educated person was described as someone who would read many diverse books. For instance the royal prodigies would be schools at home by private tutors. Those tutors would provide many philosophy, literature, economic and even political books for the young royals to read. However, over the years, the world has experienced a shift from becoming educated by going to school but also by practicing what they learn by having an internship or volunteering in the community. For instance, America is one of the countries that offers positions for high school and undergraduate students to participate in university laboratories. By being part of a team outside the classroom environment, student learn valuable skills such as working with people of different educational levels, and different expertise. But also students have the opportunity to learn essential communication skills, leaderships skills, with which no one could succeed in their work environment.

Where would we be without the knowledge presented in books, and without reading them. It is however essential that children, as young as three begin appreciating books and the knowledge available to them through the written language. By going to school, children begin to explore ideas and thoughts that would never encounter during their every day life. Core sciences such as chemistry, physics, mathematics, and biology are mandatory to be learn in school and from books. The books present the information clearly and sequentially. The books have practice problems to solidifying the concept. Furthermore, the Mendelian theory of evolution may never be tested by students it is more useful to read a book and understand the concept and theory that way. There are aspects of life which not everyone has the ability to do, unless every one would for instance become and expert in Mendelian theory.

With out the knowledge gathered from books life in a laboratory would be pointless, or very hard; due to the fact that you would not have the basic understanding of the experiment. The education from books provides the core information, upon which experience is built on. The project ran in the laboratory environemnt contains details that would never be presented in books because research may not always provide us with a concrete answer. The laboratory results may be sequential as in a book, but sometimes they are not accurate due to the possibility of errors during the experiment. Books though do not have wrong information are helpful to reference during a laboratory research.

ershad193 14 / 321  
Jul 13, 2010   #2
I'm not gonna give you any advice. What I'll say is what your essay made me think.

In your first paragraph, I think you missed an important point. Even centuries ago people used to take internships, though rather than a couple of months, these used to go on for many years. Generally called "apprenticeships", these were prevalent in fields where manual work or fine skills were needed, for example, sculpting, jewelery, etc. The education provided was mainly through practical work but there was some amount of theoretical stuff involved.

Think about this.
vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Jul 13, 2010   #3
First paragraph is totally confused. Your start should be interesting and effective.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jul 14, 2010   #4
But also Additionally, students have the opportunity to learn essential communication skills, leaderships skills, with which no one could succeed in their work environment. (now add a short sentence that clearly states the main point of the whole essay).

After that thesis sentence, start paragraph two:

Use a question mark:
Where would we be without the knowledge presented in books and without reading them?

Books that do not have wrong information are helpful to reference during a laboratory research.

The most important thing to do is use the space at the end of the first paragraph to tell the main argument. I think your argument is like this:

Even though practical experience is important, books will never lose their value because they serve a fundamental purpose.

:-)


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