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IELTS - Education is a critical driver and a game changer for any country's development



vikki 3 / 5  
Sep 22, 2012   #1
The 2oth century has been a century of knowledge and information. Several educational methods and techniques are being identified and put into practice to gain knowledge. Many are of the impression that it is education that brings prosperity to oneself and people around him. However, as with any other system, there are always some who disagree on this.

This world does contain almost equal proportion of people who agree on something and who disagree on the same thing.When it comes to education being a game-changer of a country's development and growth, some always hold to the fact that the education or knowledge attained via experience is much more powerful than the formal education. They also seem to believe strongly that disciplinr, morals and principles make a person unique or a society evolve rather than just education. they decorate an individual.

Having said this no one can deny the fact that education is rudimentary for himan development. Either formal or informal, every society has transformed into a civilised and well behaved society from what it was two thousand years ago.

Education enables one's ability to communicate with different societies and cultures. They bring in plethora of job opportunities. They make people more skillful and smart.A country with smarter and skillful workforce will always lead the eace.

To conclude, Education is a critical driver and a game changer for any country's development. Though, there are factors such as morale, ethics and ethics contribute a contry sustainance as a leader, it is education that transforms the society...

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joythblessy 86 / 266  
Sep 25, 2012   #2
Hai Br..

The question itself is not clear..

What it demands..
Discuss both sides, your opinion..?
layla88 3 / 16  
Sep 26, 2012   #3
Hi vikki,

I think these paragraphs should be combined and compose one paragraph.

When it comes to educationbeing a game-changer of a country's development and growth,( I think this definition is not so necessary, it makes hard to follow your opinion. Besides it is repeated in conclusion) some always hold to the fact that the education or knowledge attained via experience is much more powerful than the formal education.

disciplinr

discipline

they decorate an individual.

It is not so clear whether you mean formal education or discipline, morals ,principles and society evolve. They refer to what?

lead the eaceace .
[quote=vikki]ethics and ethics contribute a contry sustainancecountry sustenance as a leader,

I cannot understand this sentence.
Good luck


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