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Education, The world's most powerful tool



Najah1987 3 / 11  
Apr 30, 2012   #1
Thanks in advance for any one who will read and comment to my first essay in this great website.

Choose a topic from your personal knowledge and experience. Remember that you must utilize your first-hand experience to prove your authority to write on a topic.

Write a total of 750 to 2,500 words on your topic.


What is the world's most powerful tool that makes a great difference in its total development? Without hesitation the wise and accurate answer will be this: Education.

My personal experience with education was really challenging, especially like many students, around the world, face a financial obstacle. This obstacle made many people stop developing themselves, but I decided to choose the right path, which is simply to educate myself by making the right decision, which is joining the Penn Foster distance learning program. As a high school final 12th grade dropout, I was forced to leave my regular high school. I studied my decision and its pros and cons carefully . And I felt sure that I made the right decision.

Like the example of one of the world's most effective and successful personalities, Steve Jobs, who on his freshman six months college, dropped out for logical reasons and never regretted his decision. I chose to drop out when my final year of graduation was at very critical stage of my life. Either I would have chose to study in Ethiopia which probably would have been in a mostly rural area and leave my family who needed me for financial support. or continue to search for a better chance and opportunity and learn new experience and accepting new challenges like working and studying at the same time.My decision gave me positive results like having time and pace to learn on my own as well as learn Korean and Spanish languages and continually develop myself as well as earn money by working.

In the year of 2011, I experienced how to be teacher by having a full time job as a Kindergarten teacher, I worked also after noon classes tutor, for sure I faced lots of difficulties, but as I was teaching the children every day and feed their mind with new knowledge and develop their skills as well as get appreciated by their parents, I kept my self learning and struggling to study and complete my online courses and started learning Korean language every Wednesday on their embassy, as I was following the proverb that says: slow and steady wins the race, and other that says: if you want your dreams come true, don't sleep. I kept those and many other positive quotes and proverbs on my mind as I was working and trying to catch up and study, there were days and nights passing and I was feeling heavy and burdened by the new responsibilities and the at the same time holding myself to my ultimate goal and dream which is completing my courses and earning a diploma and enter to College and build new skills like learning and maintaining Korean Language.

By the hard work that year, I was able to pay Penn Foster tuition and have all my books shipped right away, I was so determined to graduate that year after completion of learning Korean language and graduating level 1, I studied well on three months summer vacation, I was every day assured that I am taking the right steps towards graduation. But as the school year started and I got an offer from the school I was working, I got another job offer to working on a company, I decided to join the company as a trainer for three months and work as an organizer for an exhibition ,thinking that the change of career will have a positive impact, and getting attracted by learning Spanish language free of charge in their training center, I was so overwhelmed that I, without planning, kept postponing my Penn Foster courses and promised myself that I will continue after I get full trained at my current job, of course that was very bad promise and was very negative result as the training with that company was nothing but an exhausting and overload work that proved nothing and I didn't get any certificate that proves I learned Spanish as they were not honest with their miss-management.

I felt very sorry for the time and energy that I lost working and believing in the company promises of promotion and sponsoring, but that also gave me the importance of education and that there is nothing better than graduation and earning my Diploma, as this promise is not fake and that I would be able to get Spanish as an elective at the end my online courses, through educating myself and determining to build my skills, I would reach my goal, learning from my mistakes, I made a new promise that no matter what it is, I will earn my diploma, but the need for getting job was still bothering me, I was in need for financial resource, my aunt advised me to work as a part time teacher, I was considering that but a new opportunity and a new challenge came.

On January, 2012. I got a job offer to work for Korean Company, their sector was golf sport business , I got very excited as I would be working as an administrator in a golf course and be able to learn a total new and different sport, as well as practice building my Korean language with their community, though after two months work, the business was not good and the company closed, I am still learning golf and get my stress out, during these two months I didn't repeat the mistake of ignoring my courses, I kept my self learning and studying and realized that I should avoid the idea of working as a full time employee.

Recently, I participated on Higher Education Exhibition and Conference, as one of Korean class student, I represented Korean University, there were around 400 University around the world, I saw every one seeking the dream of completing their education by earning bachelors, masters or PhDs. I gained a great four days experience and earned good money. Now I am determined not only mentally, but by having good and suitable circumstances of studying and completing my courses systematically as I am free of Job responsibilities and working only twice a week for my Taekwondo Korean Master by helping his kids with their English and take Taekwondo lessons. As well as practicing golf once a week.

In a short, sometimes in life, people have to make decisions that might look long and curvy, but never take steps back and regret or give up and always keep going and search for opportunities that opens a gate for brighter future. And never forget that this comes only through planning and make priorities comes first like education and earning a High school Diploma.

kusanagi1981 3 / 16  
May 1, 2012   #2
So, I am done checking. Hope it helped. But a word of advice. Try not to write very long sentences. Break them into small sentences. It's easier to get the meaning out of it. Good luck! :)
OP Najah1987 3 / 11  
May 9, 2012   #3
Thank you so much for your great help in my essay, I scored good grade, I just received my score from my school.. it is true when they mentioned that The Biggest Reward is Helping Others in this great forum, this will keep me motivated and more encouraged to keep writing..Thank you again for your time and effort. ^_^
OP Najah1987 3 / 11  
May 11, 2012   #4
@ kusanagi1981 I would be happy to say Thank you so much for your great help in my essay, I scored good grade, I just received my score from my school.. it is true when they mentioned that The Biggest Reward is Helping Others in this great forum, this will keep me motivated and more encouraged to keep writing..Thank you again for your time and effort. ^_^
Alice3105 2 / 4  
May 11, 2012   #5
wow! Finally, I found a place where can I really practice my writing :)
OP Najah1987 3 / 11  
May 11, 2012   #6
@Alice3105
that's really good for everyone.
hope we will do our best.
kusanagi1981 3 / 16  
May 12, 2012   #7
I was glad to help. I love helping others. I am really happy that you scored good! Please help others with their writings/ideas whenever you have time too. :D


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