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IELTS: Elderly Population in three different countries: Japan, Sweden and USA



SHanafi 120 / 357  
Mar 2, 2014   #1
The Graph show the proportion of the population 65 aged and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The line graph illustrates the changes of elderly population in USA, Sweden and Japan during a period of 100 years from 1940 to 2040.

Overall, the projection of the elder proportions shows a dramatic increase by 2040.

In 1940, the highest proportion of elderly had shown in USA, accounted nearly 10 %. This was higher than that of Sweden and Japan population which were revealed approximately 7 % and 5%. However, Apart from the brief decline over the 40 years following, the proportion of elderly in USA and Sweden gradually increased to nearly 15 % in 1980. While the figure of ageing population in USA experienced a little declined between 1980 and 200, Japan elderly population recovered at 5% in 2000.

A closer to year 2000, Japan trend will be experienced a gradual increased prior to rocket by more than 25 percent at 2040. The figure of elderly in Sweden will undergo a fluctuation before will finished at 25% while USA elderly is predicted to peak just nearly 25% at the end of the course.

Interestingly, despite Japan elderly population recorded as the lowest proportion in 1940, the forecast of its figure will be overtaken the proportion of USA and Sweden over a 100 year period.

MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Mar 2, 2014   #2
You should attach the graph with your essay.

a period 100 years

a period of 100 years

The countries who included in this survey are Japan, Sweden, and USA.

This sentence could be merged with the previous one:
The given graph shows the proportion of elderly population during a period of 100 years in three different countries, namely Japan, Sweden, and the USA.

increasingly resemble

follow a similar upward trend

the number of elderly people

the proportion/the percentage of

in 60 years appeared

This is not clear. Do you mean "the first 60 years of the period"?

the trend will developing sharply until gain the highest percentage than others in 2040.

It continues to rise until reaching an estimation of ... in 2040, which is significantly higher than the other two countries.

other trends reveal that the elderly population either Sweden or USA were quite similar

The elderly population in Sweden and the USA experienced an increase during the course.

Both of trends

Both figures

Therefore

This world should be omitted.

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