IELTS TASK 1 : The electricity consumption and cost per year

The bar shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household divides.

In a year, electricity consumption increase depending kinds of electronic. The highest electronic cost per year is spa (pump and heater). The lowest electronic cost per year is electric blanket.

Electronic which is low cost $42 per year need 500 kwh per year. There are only 5 electronics where in this part. Home computer, aquarium, dishwasher electric cooking, freezer, water bed heater, clothes dryer and washing machine are includes electronic with high cost about $83 per year. They are need about 1000 kwh per year. The higher electronic costs are refrigerator and pool pump. They are need not less 1500 kwh per year and cost $125 per year.

To sum up, usage normally of electronic cost per year is under $83 per year with 1000 kwh per year. The luxury of electronic cost per year is up $166 per year with 2000 kwh per year.

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What does the bold part really mean?



The bold part is grammatically incorrect.Simply delete "where" to make it correct.


You do not need to use the be verb " are" in that sentence.


The same issue as the first one.

Good luck :)

consider the use of "annual" instead of "per year"


Statement does not make grammatical sense...

According to the graph, the devices that do not incur significant annual electricity fees are considered to consume 500 kWh and have running fees below $42; there are 5 home appliances that can be categorized in this section;

Good luck!

The bar shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household divides.devices.

Follow the approach suggested by Pahan for this task :)

Electronic devices which isof which the cost is less thanlow cost $42 per year need less than 500 kwh per year. There are only 5 electronics wheredevices in this partcategory. Home computer, aquarium, dishwasher electric cooking, freezer, water bed heater, clothes dryer and washing machine are includes electronic with highincur higher cost aboutover $83 per year. They are need about 1000 kwh per year.

It seems overview because you tell about the main trend, so you need one part as a body paragraph to explain the detail information and this part can be conclusion.

here, you should put two verbs or delete 'where'