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[TOEFL] Environmental protection V.S Economic developments



alice0209 12 / 12  
Aug 10, 2013   #1
Topic:Governments should focus its budget more on environmental protection than on economic developments.
(Economic growth seems to be more important than environmental concerns.)


Environmental protection and economic developments might be the biggest issues in the 21st century. They are both important because they are vital to human's future and welfare. However, since the budget and the recourse are limited, governments must choose between these two issues. In my opinion, I believe that tackling down environmental problems is of the first priority rather than economic developments. The following are reasons why.

First, environmental protection is far more urgent than economic developments. All the living creatures live together on our mother Earth and she is the only one. Without Earth, whatever great civil constructions and economic achievements will end up in vain because we will all perish as she's gone. Just like a man that needs a healthy body, all the living creatures as a whole needs a strong planet as well.

Second, the influence on environmental problems are boarder and more profound than economic issues. Environmental problems are global rather than local, which means that no countries can be spared from these problems. Take global warming for example, when the temperature increases, the whole globe is affected, suffering the hotter weather together. The melting ice mountain not only jeopardizes habitats of animals living in the polar region, but its effects of the rising sea level also endangers the residents living in the small island near the equator, since the rising sea water could drown them. Environmental issues can not be divided by nationality because all humans are simply entwined together by our only home-Earth.

Some people might argue that economic issues are global and critical as well thus can not be put aside. They may say that if the economic is in a very bad situation, people would revolt instantly, while environmental problems seem to be more like chronic diseases that would not burst out right away. However, the truth is that we've been encountering so many sighs and warnings of global climate anomalies and other environmental crisis right now. It would be unwise to still deny the truth and keep focusing on economic developments and unfortunately, usually the economic developments are even the causes of environmental damages.

In conclusion, environmental conservation is more essential than economic developments in the aspects of urgency and ranges of influence. As mentioned in the second paragraph, how can a man live happily if he is unhealthy? Similarly, how can we live safely and joyfully when our home is devastated by, ironically, by ourselves?

p.s: I really care about the content of my essay. Please tell me if I made the clear point to the topic and whether my arguments and explanation are strong, thanks!!:)

ramshah 11 / 27  
Aug 10, 2013   #2
when the temperature increases, the whole globe is affected, suffering from the hotter weather together
dumi 1 / 6793  
Aug 12, 2013   #3
They are both important because they are vital to human'sour future and welfare.

However, since the budget and the recourseresources are limited, governments must choose between these two issues.

However, since resources are scarce and limited, governments need to decide which one should get priority over the other.

I believe that tackling down environmental problems is of the first priority rather than economic developments.

I believe that environmental issues should be given more consideration over economic development. ... stop at this point;

The following are reasons why.

... this one does not add any value and therefore take it off.


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