TOPIC :Why do people attend universities or colleges?
Nowadays, the key leading to success is as not limited as in the past. Long time ago, people considered successful were who graduated from universities or colleges with the diplomas because those would get high-paid jobs. Today, we can see that many people who have not graduated from high schools become millionaires or even billionaires thanks to the advance of nowadays technology and Internet. However, as far as my concern, attending universities or colleges is still very important to people's lives because it helps us to find out who we truly are, provides us with step- by -step specialized knowledge and social skills, and enhances our self-confidence.
First of all, why attending universities or colleges helps us find out who we truly are? Because when one decides to go to the university that is also the time he asks himself which career should he takes? Which schools are available for him? Who would he like to become in the future? Universities and colleges provide so many majors, which sometimes makes one confused if he has not studied himself carefully. Only through answering the questions listed above, one will find out what are his strengths/ weakness, personalities, goals of his life. Thus, he will know why and which universities or colleges he should attend to. And that's why going to universities or colleges provides people with clear visions of who they truly are and what future they would like to have.
Second, university and college are places where provide specialized knowledge and social skills which are easy to get. While lots of knowledge is now available on the internet for free, it is very difficult for one to study because of its lack of organization. University and college do not only offer a lot of majors such as engineering, journalism, economy, art, etc they do also organize those majors in such logical ways which help us easier to study. For example, when one wants to study engineering, he must first learn Mathematics, Physics and Science to have background knowledge before study to become and engineer. Those who want to work as journalists will first need to learn literature, society, writing styles first. Therefore, when attending to university or college, we receive step-by-step education in order to know how to start, how to progress our study to achieve the best results
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Besides, university and colleges are the best places to teach us about social skill before we live and work in the society. University and college are the place where many people gather, live, and study. In fact they are just like small societies where we can meet many people with many characters, who may come from different places on over the world. We will need to learn communication skills, adjust our ways of behavior to adapt life in the university not only to learn well but also to understand and be able to work well with many kinds of people.
The last but not least, attending university or college helps us to enhance our self-confidence due to many reasons. First, the time we decide to study in university or college is also when we have known who we are, what we want, and who we want to become. In short terms, we have realized own goals and people who have their goals feel more confident than those who not. Second, the knowledge we get in the university or college will guarantee that we can get jobs in the future, which ensures that we can survive in this societies. Third, people graduating from universities or colleges usually get well-paid jobs because of their being well - educated and this leads to their better status in society.
For those reasons, I strongly believe going to university or college is very essential to any people in their lives.
Please spend your valuable time helping me how to improve this essay cause I am preparing for TOEFL iBT test on 16th September :). Thanks a lot
University and college do not only offer a lot of majors such as engineering, journalism, economy, art, etc they do also organize those majors in such logical ways which help us easier to studyhelp us study easier(make our study more comfortable)
For example, when one wants to study engineering, heone must first learn Mathematics, Physics and Science to have background knowledge before study to become and engineer. (many "learn","study" in one sentences)
Those who want to work as journalists will first need to learn literature, society, writing styles first.(can you mix it with the previous sentence)
Therefore, when attending to university or college, we receiveBy this I mean, university and college provide us step-by-step education in order to know how to start, how to progress our study to achieve the best results (I like it that way :),althought this sentence seem not to be suitable to use "therefore")
Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly
( Besides, the second and the fifth paragraph are not persuasive)
_All the best, Trung_
I agree with you about the ideas. When reread it, I feel rather confused cause it's too long. I wonder whether I could give real examples to make my essay more persuasive :-?
@Phong: you should visit essayforum.com more offen :)
I wonder whether I could give real examples to make my essay more persuasive :-?
You can. Actually you can add your own experiences in all of your essay's body paragraphs. For example, you might want to describe a bit yourself or how you explore yourself when you attend Uni, how you improve you skills through uni activities...
I will reply my corrections regarding to your thread soon.
I have corrected some of your sentences and grammatical errors. I suggest you try to use short but complete sentences rather than long but incomplete or repeated sentences.
Nowadays, the key leading to success is as not limited as in the past. (Long time ago), It was considered that a successful person was someone who graduated from university or college and likely to have high-paid jobs. Today, (in the era of Internet and advanced technologies) we can see that many people who have never graduated from high schools become millionaires or even billionaires (thanks to the advance of nowadays technology and Internet.) However, as far as my concern, attending universities or colleges is still very important to the success of a person (people's lives) because it helps us to find out who we truly are, provides us with step- by -step specialized knowledge and social skills, and enhances our self-confidence.
(First of all,) why attending universities or colleges helps us find out who we truly are? Because when a person decides to go to a university he would likely to ask himself which career should he takes? Which schools are available for him? Who would he like to become in the future? Universities and colleges offer a diverse selection of majors, (which sometimes makes one confused if he has not studied himself carefully). Only through answering those questions listed above, he would be able to find out what are his strengths/ weakness, personalities, goals of his life. Thus, he would know why and which universities or colleges he should attend to. And that's why going to universities or colleges provides people with clear visions of who they truly are and what future they would like to have.
(Second,) university and college are places where provide specialized knowledge (which are easy to get). While everything is now available on the internet for free, it is very difficult for someone to study because of its lack of organization. University and college do not only offer a lot of majors (such as engineering, journalism, economy, art, etc. ) they do also organize those majors in such logical ways which help students easier to study. For example, when one wants to study engineering, he must first learn Mathematics, Physics and Science to have background knowledge before studding to become and engineer. Those who want to work as journalists will first need to learn literature, society, writing styles first. Therefore, when attending to university or college, we receive step-by-step education in order to know how to start, how to progress our study to achieve the best results
.
Besides, university and colleges are probably the best places to teach us social skills (before we live and work in the society.) University and college are the places where many people gather, live, and study. In fact they are just like small societies where we can meet many people with many characters, who may come from different places all over the world. We will need to learn communication skills, adjust our ways of behavior to adapt life in the university not only to learn well but also to understand and be able to work well with many kinds of people.
The last but not least, attending university or college helps us to enhance our self-confidence due to many reasons. (First, the time we decide to study in university or college is also when we have known who we are, what we want, and who we want to become.) In short terms, we have realized our goals and people who have their goals are likely to feel more confident than those who not. Second, the knowledge we get in the university or college will guarantee that we can get good jobs in the future (, which ensures that we can survive in this societies. )Third, people graduating from universities or colleges usually get well-paid jobs because of their being well - educated and this leads to their better status in society.
For those reasons, I strongly believe that going to university or college is a very essential period to any people in their lives.
Thanks for your advice, Hung Xuan Hoang :-)
