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Fear is not going to help us in this stage; Nuclear energy for the future



Jeecee 5 / 19  
Apr 25, 2011   #1
PLEASE HELP WITH my GRAMMAR MISTAKESSSSS and MORE.

A hundred year ago when automobile was invented, the farmers, blacksmiths, carpenters, landowners and the good citizens of the country were fighting vigorously against it because they were worried about their jobs and interests and also the loud noise of machinery disturbing the peace. Back in those days the people never concern or did not understand the consequence of pollution and destruction from modern technologies. Unfortunately in today society the automobile industry is the backbone of the world economy. It is unthinkable without them, the whole world will stands still.

In these days we are facing the same issue from nuclear energy technologies or alternative energies. Let's face it; they are here to stay in the name of modern society as well as economical advantage in term of producing cheap energy especially for the developing countries struggling to meet their needs. All and all because of you and me. I am not a big fan of fast car or anything nuclear. However, for my own comfort I still turn on my air-conditional or heater at home in different season of the year. Electricity is almost part of my life, to light my house, computer, TV and many other types of equipment. The distance from my house to my place of employment has no public transport only can be reached by car. As you can see the structure of our society is not environmental friendly.

Since automobile already part of our civilization. It is impossible to remove it altogether the only thing we could do is to impose rules and regulations to enhance public safety, to improve driving condition and to minimal pollution. More likely we might have to do the same to nuclear energy industry. Fear is not going to help us in this stage. Nuclear energy is here to stay like a bad marriage for better or worse.

anitha d souza - / 1  
Apr 28, 2011   #2
Nuclear energy helps people in various ways . They help to protect our natural conservation by providing alternative source of energy such as hydro -energy,thermal energy,and wind energy.

Using too much of water reduces the consumption of water for the animals as well as to humans.
wind energy needs lot of space to install in place
nuclear energy on the other hand provide renewable energy which can be used efficiently well.
these need basic disposal system these emmission can be dangerous to human being as these contains radioactive substance which pose dangerous to human health.
there are great advantages of using these system nuclear energy is very powerful energy these can pose danger also like misusing of these energy by terrorist and endangering lives of the people

nuclear energy also has advantage on nature they reduce the water consumptoin as an energy also thermal source thus reducing pollution at large
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 30, 2011   #3
I think cars were invented in 1925. Is that right? Or am I thinking of the television? Anyway, I like your way of writing, even though it has some grammar mistakes. Annika fixed the mistakes! Do you want to practice the correct grammar by typing the essay again and using her corrections? That way, we can keep improving it until it s perfect.

I think it is difficult to understand the main point of the essay after reading the first paragraph. It is a good idea to add a sentence to the end of that first paragraph, and make it a sentence that will tell the reader exactly what the MESSAGE OF THE ESSAY is going to be.

Please practice typing the essay with the corrections from Annika. It is the only way to learn. Get a "feeling" for the correct grammar, like this:

Since automobiles already part of our civilization. It is impossible to remove it altogether. The only...-----When you practice typing each sentence times, you will become a master of English!

Anitha, are you responding to what was written about nuclear energy, or is this your own essay? In either case, capitalize the first letter of every sentence! Also, I'll make a small edit:

The absence of a basic disposal system for these emissions can be dangerous to human beings, as these contains radioactive substances which pose dangers to human health. There are great advantages to using these system nuclear energy, as it is very powerful, but this can pose a danger. Also the misusing of this energy by terrorists is endangering lives of people.

:-)


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