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SAT: Are we free to make our decisions or are we limited by circumstances?



Itsyasmeens 2 / 9  
Apr 25, 2014   #1
Please rate my score out of 12, that'd help a lot

Thank you!

Decisions and choices aren't easy to make because they can change our future and our lives and turn them into upside down no matter how small they are. Circumstances, sometimes, limit your ability in discerning the right choices. However, only a dignified person wouldn't fall for the circumstances and life conditions.

An example that happens a lot, when people choose to steal or even kill to get money because of the conditions they are in whether paying debts or hospital bills even though its pre-domain that its wrong.

However, sometimes, we have to protect others just like a play that I've read called "All My Sons" when one of the main characters Mr.Jenner chose to deceive everyone that he was innocent over his innocent partner's innocence to protect his family from what could happen to them if he entered jail. Anyhow, you can't blame circumstances and conditions for everything because people with perspectives would always fight even though its not the cup of tea for anyone but they choose to fight instead.

At last, everyone has problems and conditions that could destroy them, ruin their dreams and turn them into worse people but if everyone fell for these circumstances, then everyone would have failed and all the great heroes would have died in vein.

minhvo 2 / 4  
Apr 26, 2014   #2
he was innocent over his innocent partner's innocence to

innocent was repetitive, it's kinda weird to read although the grammar is correct...

anyway, write more please, i'd rate 8/12 for your text.
hope this helped
officialseif 1 / 2  
Apr 26, 2014   #3
I think you need more examples , to get a 10-12 essay you need to fullfill your 2 pages.
dumi 1 / 6793  
May 3, 2014   #4
It is better if you included your prompt also in the essay. It helps us understanding the topic better :)
Decisions and choices aren't easy to make because they can change our future and our lives and turn them into upside down no matter how small they arecan be

An example that happens a lot, when people choose to steal or even kill to get money because of the conditions they are in whether paying debts or hospital bills even though its pre-domain that its wrong.

I think this you can improve a lot. First tell, people are forced or tempted to make wrong decisions depending on the circumstances they face. And then give the example :)


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