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Terminal23 6 / 10  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
Introduction,
Common people accept the best way to get information is Internet on the other hand, it is not only route of communication. In my perspective, Internet had been supplied preponderance of information to connectedly people. Yet, it is give to people rampant information and people must be selective to choose an information.

Conclusion,
In short, people has to sort out each information from internet. There are provide to people out of control facts. I would suggest that need smart consumer to be internet user.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
Please include the original prompt every time you post your writing. The question helps us understand the topic and task given.

Common people accept the best way to get information is Internet

The Internet as the source of the information is the latest communication tool.

on the other hand, it is not only route of communication.

Although this is true to some extent, such a tool opens up more opportunities for those who deal with.

In my perspective, Internet had been supplied preponderance of information to connectedly people.

In my opinion, the Internet has successfully changed the way people communicate.

Yet, it is give to people rampant information and people must be selective to choose an information.

However, people should be wiser to use this technology as the reliability of its information cannot be justified.

Well, it seems that you are trying to use BIG WORDS in this session. For your information, IELTS is not a vocabulary test, so using BIG WORDS will NOT help you score higher. Use plain English is always better, since this language brings clarity.

Hope this helps :D
Naoki28 10 / 18 2  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
... and people must be selective to choose an information.

In short, people has have to sort out each ...
...There are provide providing to people out of control facts.
Maya29 14 / 18 14  
Aug 30, 2016   #4
Hi Terminal 23,
It is an unique name for sure. You have had a some valuable advises from one of the EF contributors here, please allow me to give you some other suggestions.

First, even though you are not writing a full essay, giving the task (question) in your post will help us to understand it better and give feedback not only from grammatical and sentence structures but also from the content.

Common people accept the best way to get information is Internet on the other hand, it is not only route of communication.From my perspective, this sentence is hard to understand. It is better to have this sentence as the paraphrase of your question. Since I do not know it, I will give you another option for the sentence.Some people think that the Internet is the most convenient way to get information. However, others see there are many other good communication tools to deal with.(Please remember to write "the" before Internet, so it should be "the Internet")

Yet, it is gives to people rampant information and ...("be" should not be followed by verb1 and it is singular please add "s")

In short, people hashave to sort out each ...

In short, people has to sort out [...] smart consumer to be internet user.
(I have an example of simpler sentences as your reference:
In short, the Internet users have to sort out each facts that they get from the Internet to prevent misinformation. If it is needed, they can cross check it first. By doing those, they also become a smart and reliable consumer.)


I do agree with Mr. Eddies suggestion that it will be better to use simple sentence in a good grammatical and structure than using a high vocab and confusing sentence. In my point of view, clarity is the biggest factor in writing.

I hope my suggestions will help you. Keep learning and writing. :)


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