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[TOEFL] Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance.



something 23 / 51  
Dec 9, 2013   #1
TOPIC : Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree
or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.


Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance. Thereby, evaluating from students is one of the ways to improve quality of educational system. Not only teachers could amplify their performance but the whole education system are also improve performance from evaluation made by students. Therefore, I agree with this notion that students should be asked to evaluate their teachers.

To begin with, Evaluating teachers made by students could improve teachers' performance. For example, evaluation made by students is similar to feedback from customer that business owners need to know in order to improve their product. Students might complain about their teachers spoke too fast that students could not catch up on information. Consequently, teachers could improve themselves by speaking slower to make sure that students could get all information that they want to give. Therefore, evaluating from students could improve teachers' performance.

Additionally, this evaluation from students could improve schools' quality. Teachers could augment their quality. Consequently, When school gather teachers that have great performance, school are gaining higher quality. For instance, in many cooperation such as Microsoft that could produce many great products because they have employees whose performance are very high. Schools could produce intellectual students because school have teachers who are always improve their quality from evaluation made by students.

Finally, people who get the most advantage from evaluation is students. Students could study in class that have teachers who have experienced and greater performance. Because teachers are always adapt the way they teach in order to make students easy to understand their subjects, students could comprehend their subject easily. As a result, students, who study from great schools which have great performance teacher, graduate with great knowledge to survive in next steps of life.

In conclusion, I agree with this statement that school should ask students to evaluate their teachers because teachers could improve their performance. Moreover, schools are also improve their quality because they have high performance teachers. Furthermore, students are easy to understand their subjects. Thus, I believe that there are benefits to ask students to evaluate their teachers.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 9, 2013   #2
Thereby, evaluatingevaluations from students is one of the ways to improve quality of educationaleducation system.
Your introduction fails to present the other side of the argument. When you explain the background of the issue, both sides should be presented to the reader.

To begin with, Evaluating teachers made by students could improve teachers' performance.

.... there are some grammar issues;
To begin with, students' evaluation on teachers helps improve teachers' performance.

. For example, evaluation made by students is similar to feedback from customer that business owners need to know in order to improve their product.

Actually this is not an example, but further illustration of your reasoning;
Students are the recipients of teachers' services and therefore they know best how do teachers perform. It is like getting customers to evaluate service providers in view of improving customer service standards.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 9, 2013   #3
Additionally, this evaluation from students could improve schools' quality.

Additionally, students' evaluation on teachers' performance helps schools to improve the quality of education they provide.

Teachers could augment their quality.

.... this sentence has no meaning, rather it has no relevance to the previous reason.
Now you need to tell how schools are going to be benefited by students' evaluation on teachers. You can say, the school can assess the teachers' strengths and weaknesses from such evaluations and provide them with necessary training to enhance their productivity.
OP something 23 / 51  
Dec 9, 2013   #4
Thank you for your recommendation.


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