to numerous changes in the environment
in* numerous ...to* the..
It is clear that the warming of the Earth's atmosphere will result to numerous changes in the environment if not reduced now
Swap the "if not.." to the beginning of the sentence. It is clear that if not reduced now, the warming of ...
With global warming increasing, it may lead to disease, extreme weather, species affected and sea levels rising.
keep the series parallel. (keep the tense the same)
When the atmosphere warms, the surface of the ocean and land
may also warm.
Sea levels will begin to rise in low-lying areas, causing flooding and land to disappear forever.
Here the second clause modifies the wrong noun. Move "in low-lying areas" to the front of the sentence.
Also, within the paragraph, you change tense, from conditional, to present, to future. try to be a little more consistent if you can.
also, even though some people are speculative about global warming does not mean that you must take the "this may happen. that may occur" stance. assert your own opinion by taking out the may. unless, of course, you don't agree with global warming.
another thing, you can split the first paragraph into several smaller paragraphs, each dealing with a more specific point instead of going back and forth between natural disaster/flooding/natural disaster/flooding. from what you have here, you can organize into the effects of global warming on the glaciers/atmosphere, effects on the water levels and increase flooding, effects on the environments near/that need water, and effects from increased disease, with each general effect having its own paragraph. Bring together the quotes inside those paragraphs to better flush out your thoughts.
Such as mosquitoes and other insects are beginning to change location meaning, in which they are beginning to adapt in new areas.
Today 45 percent of the world's people live where they might get bitten by a mosquito carrying the parasite that causes malaria; that percentage may increase to 60 percent if temperatures rise.
good info. do you have a source for those percentages?
At this rate is increasing everyday and must be declined before anymore problems occur.
As* this...(incomplete sentence?)
are happening quickly
even occurring now when it says: "However, the vast majority of scientists, especially those that have a strong knowledge in climate and related areas have concluded that rapid and dramatic changes are just around the corner, and some of this change is already occurring."All of these climate change effects are indirectly related to global warming.
why this quote here? it does not quite flow well. also, indirect would be like, i killed a fly; a lizard lost its dinner and died. i killed to lizard indirectly. however, if i find the lizard and hit its head with a stick, i have directly killed it. here, those climate changes are direct results of global warming, but the side effects, flooding, spread of disease, etc are indirect
make a stronger stance towards global warming, and re-organize.
good luck~ cheers