IELTS: Freedom to Creative artists
Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas(in words, pictures, music or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Amount of freedom to be given to artists in order to express their views has always been a topic of interest in all the societies for ages. Should an authority interfere with the idea propagated by a piece of art or should they leave it up to the society's acceptance or rejection? In my opinion there should not be any restrictions whatsoever. This essay will provide reasons with supporting examples in order to prove the importance of providing an absolute independence to art.
In a number of countries authors, through their novels and articles, have helped their society transition from an orthodox and fundamentalist mind-set to a liberal and progressive one. Amidst all the adversaries, by their piece of work they always try to portray a true picture of their respective community. Look at how a noted writer Taslima Nasreen in her creations has criticized the radicalization of Bangladesh. She was out casted by her religion and country for decades but her piece of work is finally making Bangladesh a liberal country. Therefore, it is necessary to provide complete freedom to the artists for a better future of a nation.
Art has an inherent feature to keep people contended and blissful. We have observed that the countries that have interfered with any art form have suffered on the overall happiness index of their citizens. A very good example to look at is Singapore government's ruling to ban street art calling it nothing more than clutter. Street arts are usually used to express anger against atrocities of people in power. A series of such restrictions over songs, movies and news articles have made Singapore harbinger in number of suicide cases reported due to depression. Thus a society cannot be free of frustration with any kind of censorship of expression.
After going through all the above points I can safely conclude that any kind of interference by the government on artist's freedom of expression has always worked negatively for a society. Therefore, it's a necessity for any authorities to stay completely away from any idea of censorship of art.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15460 Asit, you have written 347 words. You dedicate all of your time to writing the task, and no time at all to editing the work. Which is why, even though you wrote more than the required 250 words, it will not be possible for you to get a passing grade with this paper. For starters, you will not have the time allowance to write 400 words. It cannot be done due to the review and editing required of your work. This essay, which you did not edit for mistakes shows more than several grammatical errors that you did not address prior to submitting the essay for review. That is sloppy work. You have to edit your work before submitting it otherwise you risk failing the test due to over complacency. It is not enough that you met the word requirements or wrote a lot of words. That does not assure you of passing the test. Writing academically, avoiding grammar and sentence structure issues, and making sure your thoughts are clear in your writing are what will help you get a passing score. This essay does not do that for you.
In a Task 2 essay, it is better if you avoid creating rhetorical sentences such as questions that do not really have responses. That is because doing so tends to change the prompt topic. In this instance, when you presented the question, you then failed to properly respond to the extent question:
Discussion Question: To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Response: This essay will provide reasons with supporting examples in order to prove the importance of providing an absolute independence to art.
Proper Response: I totally agree that the government should not interfere with artistic freedom.
You will immediately fail the TA requirement when it comes to the prompt paraphrase because you have failed to outline the discussion instruction and respond to the discussion question based on the original presentation. How did you end up changing the question? You did that when you offered this rhetorical question:
Should an authority interfere with the idea propagated by a piece of art or should they leave it up to the society's acceptance or rejection?
I would be better if you do not mention names of people that the examiner may not know about. Keep the discussion simple using more current or popular names when writing your opinion. That way the examiner will not have to look up the person you are talking about. It is not necessary to use names, your personal opinion would work just the same.
Had you reviewed this paper before submitting it, you would have noticed that you lacked a comma after a conjunction and an introductory element. These are the types of mistakes that could be avoided if you had taken the time to review your paper before submitting it. Proper punctuation marks have a direct bearing on your GRA score. Mistakes count in this instance. Contractions may also have a negative effect on your GRA score so always spell out the words such as It's - It is to avoid possible down scores.
You conclusion is also a continued discussion of the given topic. This created an open ended rather than a closed essay discussion. The concluding paragraph is always a summary of your given discussion in relation to the prompt topic. If you fail to present the essay in that manner then you will not have properly concluded the presentation. Open ended essays tend to lower the TA score as well.
In this instance, you tried to show off your knowledge about the topic instead of focusing on the simplified presentation of your English language skills. Your skills are more important than your knowledge of the topic. Keep it simple, don't overdo it. Your score will be better for it.
