(IELTS graph) Death rates and Medical funds for Someland in 1990

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below.
- You should write at least 150 words.
- Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.

The given bar charts provide information regarding the death rates of someland and the fund allocated for six major diseases in 1990. These six categories of diseases included TB, AIDS, topical diseases, diarrhoea, malaria and leprosy.

At a glance, the deaths due to TB were the highest among the six categories, whereas, the money allocated for medical research of AIDS were the topest. Turning to detail, in the first chart, there were a marginal difference of 0.1 million deaths between the deaths due to topical diseases 0.3million and malaria 0.4millon. Diarrhoeal deaths were 0.5 million and it holded the second major cause of death. The least five causes of deaths were leprosy 0.1million, AIDS 0.2million, topical diseases 0.3million, and malaria 0.4million. The deaths due to TB were 2.5 times more than that of diarrhoeal deaths and was 1.8 million.

In the second graph, the funding for medical researches leprosy and topical diseases were roughly the same 75 million. The money allowed for the medical research of malaria and diarrhoea were 50 million and 60 million respectively. The least funds were given for the medical research for TB, which was only 30 million.

In short, although the deaths due to TB were the highest in Someland, least money was allocated for its research. The government in Someland recognized the importance of AIDS control and prevention and the highest amount of money is allowed for its medical research, though the deaths due to it was holding the fifth position in 1990.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below.
- You should write at least 150 words.
- Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.

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.... This is good as it describes what the charts present and as per the above framework, this is very much aligned with it. However, I think you can still improve its presentation;

The charts provide information regarding death rates and funds allocated for researching on six major diseases, namely TB, AIDS, Tropical diseases, Diarrhoea , Malaria and Leprosy, in 1990.

Hi, Thanks for the comment.
By the way,It would be better off using collective terms, rather than actual figures in certain instances.

The least five causes of deaths were below the margin of 0.5 million.
Diarrhoeal deaths were 0.5 million and it ACCOUNTED FOR the second major cause of death.
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Hai Dumi and Desilva

Hai Dumi..

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Hai Desilva..

thanks for the corrections..

Christy