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The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008.



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Aug 14, 2024   #1
The line graph illustrates the amount of money US government expenditures on research in five fields (Health, Space, Energy, General Science and Other) from 1980 to 2008. Overall, there was an upward trend in all four kinds of research: Health, Space, Energy and General Science over the period of 28 years. While, the figure for Other decreased slightly between 1980 to 2008. In addition, it can be seen that US government spent the most money on Health research.

Starting at around $8 billion, the number of expenditures government spent on Health dropped slightly in 1984 before rising dramatically over the next four years and reached a peak at around $23 billion in 2004. After that, this figure witnessed a decrease in 2008. In contrast, the fund that government spent on General Science was the lowest over the period. A fluctuation was seen over 20 years before remaining unchanged at $5 billion from 2000 to 2008.

In 1984, the amount of money the government spent on three kinds of research: Space, Energy and Other was the same, at $5 billion. After this year, there was a climb in the number of expenditures in both research Space and Energy, at $9 billion and $7 billion respectively. The opposite was true for the figure for Other, it can be seen a slight growth from 1984 to 2000 before returning back same value in 1984.





Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15168  
Aug 14, 2024   #2
This is too wordy for a Task 1 essay. It contains 231 words, which indicates that you took at least 30 minute to write this essay instead of the allotted 20 minutes for the task. Keep this essay short. Do not write more than 200 words and stuck to the 20 minute allowance. Failure to do so endangers your Task 2 essay completion, which will be losing minutes because some of it will be allotted to the task 1 essay. You do not want to take time away from the task 2 essay because you will get an automatic failing score if you fail to complete that writing task within the 40 minute allowance.

I will not review the content of this essay for now due to the overwriting that occurred. This cannot be reviewed because it is not an accurate reflection of how well you can write an essay within 20 minutes. I will review the next one that you will be writing, provided it falls under the correct word number already.


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