WRITING TASK 1: The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports

popularity of basketball, tennis, badminton and rugby

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The line graph compares the quantity of people who took parts in basketball, tennis, badminton and rugby in a particular region from 1985 to 2005.

It can be seen that tennis participants registered the highest figure in the period. In contrast, the figure for that of rugby decreased significantly and finished the period at the lowest place, which was the same as badminton players. In addition, the quantity of people playing basketball remained steady over the period supplied.

At the beginning of the period, the number of people taking parts in rugby was approximately 250, which was higher than that of tennis, at 150. From 1985 onwards, the trend of rugby decreased steadily to 50 in 2005, contrary to the upward trend of tennis, which reached about 225 at the end of the period.

For basketball and badminton, the figure for participants in 1985 was about 80 and 50, respectively. The number of people taking parts in basketball remained at around 85 during the given period. Similarity, after decreasing to 49, that of badminton stayed stable until 2005.

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You keep on using a reference to "parts" in the essay, which is normally used to describe personal abilities or talents. The reference word for this essay is actually "part" which indicates a portion of a whole, as in the whole of people surveyed who took part in the activities listed. It appears that you need to build on your English vocabulary so you can learn the differences in meaning of words that emanate from a seemingly word root, but with different meanings. Additionally, you have not changed the summary presentation enough for it to be scored as an original statement from you. There are too many original words in the presentation that would still qualify the summary as a cut and paste job on your part.