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# The graphs exhibit the information on world population growth from 1800 to 2100 / Urban Populations

l1h4h 3 / 5 1
Dec 30, 2016   #1
Writing Task 1- The Figures of World Population Growth and Figures for Urban Populations

The graphs exhibit the information on world population growth from 1800 to 2100 and the number of urban populations in different world regions. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the world population growth increased slightly from 1800 to 1940 and increased significantly from 1940 to 2040. Whereas, the world population growth decreased sharply between 2060 and 2100.

It is apparent from the figures that developing regions jumped significantly every five years. While, developed regions remained stable from 2015 to 2040. Furthermore, the number of people in developing regions increased sharply to 4000 millions in 2040. In contras to this, the number of populations in developed regions stayed the same about 1000 millions from 2015 to 2040.

In addition, the number of populations growth around 2500 millions in 1940. Then, the number of populations jumped dramatically around 8000 millions from 1960 to 2040. Hence, the world population growth reached a peak in 2040. And, the population growth declined steeply to 6000 millions in 2100.
ayrahumairah 3 / 4
Dec 30, 2016   #2
hi Liha, Good Evening!! here i want to give you some suggestions...

The graphs exhibit the information on world population growth from 1800 to 2100 and the number of urban populations in different world regions.

you need to paraphrase the introduction,then you didn't mention the second graph clearly, because you only put the year not the regions, so make it clear please...

thank you, have a nice weeekend!!
ded15 6 / 9 1
Dec 30, 2016   #3
Hello Liha
I have some advice for you:

It can see from your writing that you mention a prediction (when you write 2040, 2060 and 2100). So you need to use future tense.
For example, "Whereas, the world population is predicted will decrease sharply ..."

And there are also some mistakes in your body paragraph.

I hope it can assist you Ms!
Dec 30, 2016   #4
hello lovely, I copied than paste your writing just in case to be you comparasion. The senstences in "()" is my correction.

... world population ... in different world regions (no need to mention world regions, u need to paraphrase it)

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