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"My grown up Christmas list" song


violonc_21 4 / 13  
Jun 11, 2011   #1
I don't know why I choose the song "My grown up Christmas List" to listen now, maybe I am lost in memory, maybe I miss my childhood and my Mom very much, or simply I haven't listened to an English song for a long time, for months. Or because I only want to listen to Kelly Clarkson's voice now, a beautiful voice which I love so much.

I already study 4 periods of English at school. Oh no, I must say exactly in the dorm of our school. My university doesn't have enough classrooms for all students so that more classes are placed at some of rooms in the dorm, of course there're tables and a board in need.

I feel disappointed after class. It has been my feeling for long time. Sometimes I felt very excited about the lesson some of days in the past, but I soon realized my problem is that I am not self- confidient and I still have not become a confidient person as I expect.

Some English songs really give me relaxtion, peace, and they warm my heart a lot. I always feel like adventuring an interesting world, getting a new feeling and enjoying an exciting experience when listening to an English song. That's enough to illustrate my thought and my passion. Ah, also US film about life, love, friend, adventure and childhood make me feel so.

When will I become a confidient, never say can't and not fear person? When is this day?
I must have a strong heart.
Not feel bored and unmotivated any more. Practice and try to the best of my ability.
To keep my Dreams.
To love more, share all of things I have without receiving with the people who I love
And Give all of love and inspsiration to My Passion.
To Live My Life!
P/S: Maybe I need a list,
A list of the Dreams of my life!

Do you remember me
I sat upon your knee
I wrote to you
with childhood fantasies
Well, I'm all grown up now
And still need help somehow
I'm not a child
But my heart still can dream
So here my lifelong wish
My grown up christmas list
Not for myself
But for a world in need
No more life's torn apart
That wars would never start
And time would heal all hearts
And everyone would have a friend
And right would always win
And love would never end
This is my grown up christmas list

As children we believed
The grandest sight to see
Was something lovely
Wrapped beneath our tree
Well heaven only knows
That packages and bows
Can never heal
A hurting human soul
(rythms)
What is this illusion called the innocence of youth
Maybe only in our blind belief can we ever find the truth.
...
This is my grown up christmas list
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learner2 1 / 5  
Jun 11, 2011   #2
hello.I practice writing and I should notice you It is just practice if you don't mind.and also i add that i have not high education.

I don't know why I choosehave chosen the song "My grown up Christmas List" to listen now.

I hop that you forgive me!!!!!!!!!!
OP violonc_21 4 / 13  
Jun 11, 2011   #3
I'm glad you clarify it for me!
While writing this essay I always wonder "some of rooms" is true or not,
or "in the dorm". May we use the preposition "in" in that situation?
Thanks!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 12, 2011   #4
Capitalize every word of the title: "My Grown Up Christmas List"

...to listen now. Maybe I am lost in memory, maybe I miss my childhood and my Mom very much, or maybe I simply haven't listened to an English song for a long time, for months.----I fixed the grammar of this sentence.

You have such an interesting style of writing! It really keeps the reader interested. You must have been inspired by the song, because your writing is like a song.

:-)
OP violonc_21 4 / 13  
Jun 12, 2011   #5
Thanks EF_KEVIN Moderator. Your comment ecourages me a lot at this moment. I will remember all your say. You make me believe that I can do everything I have dreamed in this life. I bookmarked your profile page this morning (according to Viet Nam's time zone it's night now) because I simply think I will learn a lot of things through all the threads suggested and corrected from you, which helps me improve not only English but also the life skill. Anyway, Thanks!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 14, 2011   #6
Thanks for the kind words, Ly Thu Huong. Also, thanks for the great work you did here!
I appreciate the thoughtful effort. Please check out the contributor page.
OP violonc_21 4 / 13  
Jun 16, 2011   #7
When I saw the link to page "EssayForum Contributor Page" I am very happy but just a little anxious about whether I myself will be capable of contributing to EssayForum with my English or not, will I be accepted?.etc... because I am just a new member. But after checking this page I felt more self confident, thank you so much! It's a good new thing to me and I feel better to try hard to the best of my ability. Thanks Kevin Moderator! :-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 18, 2011   #8
Yes! Contributing at EF is not about being an English expert. It's about adding some of your own energy to give people ideas, inspiration, and... just let people know how their essay affected you and how it made you think about them.

Thanks for being here!


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