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What happens within a procrastinator's brain and a rational decision maker's brain


rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
TED SUMMARY 4 - PROCRASTINATION by Tim Urban

A writer blogger became a speaker on TED VIDEO, he talked about what happens within a procrastinator's brain and a rational decision maker's brain, called Tim Urban, explained that there are two kinds of procrastinators in the world, those are someone who procrastinates something until the deadline times comes closer and someone who postpones something for a long time because there is no a deadline for the thing he is delayed in life. A large number of characteristics of a procrastinator can be clearly seen in his brain, such as enjoy a pastime, adore something easy and fun, do something unproductive, and has an instant gratification style. The procrastinators like to delay the assignment until the deadline time comes closer. On contrary, the rational decision maker always makes sense to be doing thing at the time, good in drawing his future in detail, able to visualize his long plan in the long run clearly, and always urge himself to complete a task before the time. Based on what Urban said that a non-procrastinator does not exist in the world, everybody is a procrastinator of something in life.

PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hello Rosa,

he [you should mention before the speaker male or female than you write he or she after mentioned it] talked about what happens ...

that there [double conjuction I thing] there are two kinds of ...

.., do something unproductive, and has an instant gratification style.

On contrary [I think word, "on contrary" when speaker negative explanation, I think better in contrary], the rational decision maker ...

hope these help
zul2805_es 7 / 18  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Let me help you and give you some suggestions:

1. ... until the deadline time comes closer Repetition, you can change it into "runs out " or you can make a slightly different sentence like this "The procrastinators like to delay the assignment until they run out of the deadline ".

2. ... able to visualize his long planplans in the long run clearly, and always argueargues (subject verb agreement ) himself to complete a task before the time.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 27, 2016   #4
A writer blogger became a speaker on TED VIDEO, he talked ...

extremely complex and complicated to force it becomes only a sentence
you may write:
A write blogger who became a speaker on TED VIDEO talked about what happens within a procrastinator's brain and a rational decision maker's brain. Tim Urban, what he called, explained that there are two kinds of procrastinators in the world.

Those are someone who procrastinates something until the deadline times comes closer and someone who postpones something for a long time because there is no a deadline for the thing he is delayed in life.
this style of writing would not reduce the quality of your work while those sentences are still in complex form. indeed, it makes your writing easier to comprehend. this is what matter in effective communication

A large number of characteristics of a procrastinatorprocrastinator's characteristics can be clearly seen in his brain, such as a tendency to enjoy a pastime, .......

The procrastinators [repetitive. instead of looking for synonym of certain words to avoid repetition, you may simply just mention its definition] like to delay ......


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