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IELTS: High price of petrol as sollution the traffic and pollution;the Nederland



SHanafi 120 / 357  
Mar 26, 2014   #1
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems
To what extend do you agree and disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective ?
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High price of petrol reduces the hazardous of traffic and pollution. However, such possible solution is effectively viewed to tackle the lives of inhabitants at risk while some critics argue this assumption. Even though I agree that high price of petrol effect substantial solution for inhabitant's problem, it is likely that a considerable number of additional measures should be pondered.

High price of petrol indirectly persuaded inhabitants to use public transportation. Obviously, when tremendous inhabitants use mass transportation, the pollution caused by private vehicles can be fell dramatically. While this way is proved by the Nederland who have high rate of public transport usage, becoming pedestrian with clean air in this country is an interesting experience. On the other hand, high price of petrol not surprisingly propel gigantic demonstration as the critics while the lower earning cannot afford the daily needs.

However, far beyond any other measure, there might be some possible approach. Adding environmental subject in school might raise schoolchildren self-awareness to preserve environmental surrounds. Therefore, if it well-acculturate, they will maintain friendly environmental behaviour when adultness come. A more detailed look at the measures shows that the overall outcome in numbers is not always similar. Taking an instance from Indonesia's government program which namely Adiwayata, such a mark for friendly environment school. While it still produce unfriendly student who commonly litter trash outside the dustbin, this program run ineffectively.

It seems to me that the aforementioned evidence reveals measures not always similar with the outcome. While government suggest an approach to tackle inhabitants problems, it impossible to success without self awareness in each citizen.


Linh Hoang 5 / 12  
Mar 26, 2014   #2
maybe you're trying to replacing many simples word by synonyms, but sometime it gets confusing.
tremendous inhibitants -> many people
schoolchildren -> students
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 27, 2014   #3
Adding environmental subject into school curriculummightraise schoolchildrenwould build theirself- awareness to preserveprotect the environmentenvironmental surrounds.

Therefore, if it well-acculturate, they will maintain friendly environmental behaviour when adultness come.

This is pretty confusing :( You better rephrase :(
crystal941 6 / 10  
Mar 27, 2014   #4
tackle the lives of inhabitants at risk

What's the meaning of this phrase?

I think you can use prevent instead of tackle.


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