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IELTS : Home or Office? Home is better



colin 23 / 47  
Dec 18, 2012   #1
Some people prefer to work at home while others prefer to work in their offices. Which one do you prefer?

With the advanced technology that makes remote working possible, many people can perform tasks at home, communicating with others simply via email, online networks and video conferencing. While some people argue that they prefer working at an office complex, I believe that working at home would be a better choose, for it can benefit employees, employers and society.

For employees, working at home would save their considerable time. Without time-consuming travelling between office and home, white-collar workers will be able establish a balance between work and life. For example, single mothers, who is also an office lady, would be capable of taking care of their babies while working days. For business owners, the high operating costs can be reduced by the laissez-fair management. Thereby, employers can invest money in extending businesses, without having to pay skyrocketing rents in the Central Business Districts. Most importantly, with less commuters travelling and fewer demand of electricity in the metropolis, many social problems can be curbed. Undeniably, urban traffic congestion can be alleviated and carbon emission can be reduced, which is essential for economic and social sustainability.

However, performing tasks in office block may have three merits. From psychological perspective, cooperating with colleagues can dispel loneliness and boredom. Having teammates accompany with, we will feel passionate and confident, with a high morale in a teamwork. Another benefit is that working together is a contributing factor in establishing organizational culture. If everyone are staying at home without a chance of face-to-face contact, each employee would be indifferent to colleagues and works. Lastly, working in office can enhance productivity. Compared with reliance on workers' self-discipline, managers can supervise work process directly, receive feedback immediately and execute tasks efficiently.

From what has been discussed, although people may profit from working in offices, most of the people including employees, employers and citizens have benefited more from the policy of working at home.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 19, 2012   #2
Good introduction. You introduce the topic well; express your opinion clearly.... Good Job! : )

For employees, working at home would save their considerable time considerably.

.... With this correction, it reads better

Without time-consuming travelling between office and home, white-collar workers will be able to establish a good balance between work and life.

.... this insertion of the word "good" brings in a great effectiveness to this sentence.

For example, single mothers, who is also an office lady, would be capable of taking care of their babies while working days.

For example, single mothers who are also working, would be able to take a better care of their children if they can perform their job functionalities at home.

Overall, you have written a good essay. You understand the essay structure very well!


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