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IELTS: Honey bees life cycle


SHanafi 120 / 417 93  
May 12, 2014   #1
The diagrams presents the live cycle of honey bees.

Overall, the life stages is comprised of six stages from egg to full maturity, and takes approximately 5 weeks to complete.

The first stage of the cycle is started when the queen laying 1 or 2 eggs once in 72 hours regularly. Then the eggs hatch between 9 and 10 days to transform to nymph, immature form of an insect, some parts of the eggs is still surround the nymph's body. Over the three weeks after the egg hatching, the nymph experiences the three stages of moulting, shed or lose old feathers, hair or skin to allow for new growth.

The first stage of moulting directly happened 5 days after the eggs hatch. As result, the nymph without eggshell and un-stripes in the back preparing to the next stages. While the second moulting stages is identified the next following week as the nymph growing bigger, the back stripe, sign of maturity, have not shown yet the nymph's back. Totally after 21 days after the eggs hatch, young adult emerges with complete back stripes. Running from the fifth to the final stage, it is need 4 days for young bee transforms to the adult whose back marked with bolder and darker stripes, and the cycle starts over again.




Andy_Vo 2 / 5  
May 13, 2014   #2
Over the three weeks

Over the next three weeks, or during the next three weeks
dumi 1 / 6,936 1592  
May 13, 2014   #3
Thediagrams presents the live cycle of honey bees.

diagrams present / diagram presents
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of honey bees,

Overall, the life stages is comprisedlife cycle of honey bees is comprised of six stages from egg to full maturity, and takes approximately 5 weeks to complete.

You need to pay more attention to your grammar !
Pahan 1 / 1,913 553  
May 14, 2014   #4
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