House is a good place to protect you, to relax yourself as well as give you more freedom.

Topic : You have enough money to buy a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?

Essay:
Some people would like to buy a business if he had enough money. From my point of view, it is better to purchase a house than a business because I think it has more advantages.

First of all, the house is a place where you feel safe and peaceful. The house will protect you from bad whether such as raining, snowing or storming. For example, you would not be wet when it is raining. You don't feel hot by sunshine when you get in the house. If you don't have a house, it is very dangerous to be outside when a storm is coming. Furthermore, the house can prevent traffic noise and air pollution to make your life more beautiful.

Secondly, the house is a perfect place for you to relax after hard-working day. Imagining that you work hard all day and you just hope to go home quickly to relax. You can watch TV, rest on your coach and have a deep sleep on your own bed at home. You also enjoy cooking in your own kitchen or doing exercise. Moreover, you can invite your friends to visit your home so that you can chat and have fun together, which is a good way to get along well with your friends and relax yourself.

Last but not least, if you have your own house, you can do anything you like without permission of your parent. Now, I am living with my parent and I always dream of my perfect house. I would not only paint my house with my favorite color but also decorate it with necessary and beautiful furniture. In addition, I always want a garden with full of tree and flower where I can enjoy fresh air and peaceful atmosphere.

These reasons may be not persuasive to all people, but they lead me personally to believe that purchasing a house has more benefits than buying a business because a house is a good place to protect you, to relax yourself as well as give you more freedom.

Essay:
Some people would like to buy a business if they had enough money.

The house will protect you from bad weather such as raining, snowing or storming.
You don't feel hot from the sunshine when you get in the house.
Furthermore, the house can prevent traffic noise, and air pollution, to make your life more beautiful.

Imagining that you worked hard all day and you just hope to go home quickly to relax. You can watch TV, rest on your coach and have a deep sleep, on your own bed, at home.

Last but not least, if you have your own house, you can do anything you like without permission of your parents . Now, I am living with my parents and I always dream of my perfect house.

In addition, I always want a garden full of trees and flowers, where I can enjoy fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere.

These reasons may be not persuasive to all people, but they lead me personally to believe that purchasing a house has more benefits than buying a business because a house is a good place to protect you, to relax yourself, as well as give you more freedom.

I made a few word and grammar changes, just basic proofreading. The lion share of the essay, has good form, and I believe you make your point clearly.

Thanks for sharing!