IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Housing and accommodation - buying or renting?)

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ?

Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

In recent years, an increasing number of individuals consider it more crucial to own a house rather than rent one in some countries. In my concern, people tend to gain more advantages from owning a home rather than renting one.

For many years, in some countries, owning a house is a symbol of safety, especially for people in Asia where having their own house is a big milestone for them. To illustrate, in Vietnam, when people began their working life, saving money to purchase their own house is the ultimate goal because it is the fundamental factor in building a stable family. Additionally, as a property owner, a house is also a long-term investment since housing prices tend to skyrocket each year. For instance, a small studio apartment in District 1, Ho Chi Minh City after 5 years from 2017, doubled its price since then. In this case, people can make a lot of profit just by selling it and investing in another one.

On the other hand, while having our own house brings us a stable life, people who rent a home will have to face numerous problems. Firstly, when people rent a house, the rent expense will depend largely on the landlord and the economic situation at that time. Furthermore, most rentals did not give renters much control over the house, such as changing the house's structure or paint colors. However, that is not to say renting a house does not have its benefits. Since people want to live in good accommodation in the urban city but the problem following is the price to owning a house is too expensive. That is when renting comes as a great solution.

To conclude, I strongly believe that owning a home is better than renting one because it positively impacts the owner. Therefore, the final decision on buying or renting still depends on the readiness of each.

The writer has a fixation on referencing a time frame although none is mentioned in the first topic version. This is an inappropriate writer added piece of information that creates an inaccurate topic interpretation. it is of the utmost scoring importance that no alterations are made to the original information presentation. Do not include unsupported statements that cannot be verified by the original source. Considered a topic alteration, this piece of writer included thought will lower the task accuracy score. As for the opinion segment, the writer would have had a better scoring first paragraph had he used the following complete writer's opinion instead:


There are a few reasons why this would have made for a better opinion presentation:
1. It creatively implies that the writer views home ownership as a positive development.
2. It allows the examiner to get a clearer opinion basis from the writer in reference to owning a home.

The above presentation helps create a stronger reference to the upcoming discussion paragraphs. There are however, 2 points for improvement in the same sentence:
1. There is no need for a strong / emotional response since the writing instruction does not ask the writer to quantify the degree of his opinion.

2. Including the 2 positive reasons in summary form would have created an excellent overview of the upcoming discussion, leading to the clearest possible writer's opinion reference and basis for task accuracy scoring.

Since the writing instruction does not call for a comparative analysis of the two sides, the writer will lose points for using the incorrect discussion format. The questions provided demanded that the explain only his positive support of the opinion. For every sentence topic or paragraph that does not support that format, the writer will lose C+C and TA scores. That is because he will be confusing the reader who will then wonder if he truly believes this is a positive development and, the discussion as presented will remain under developed or improperly discussed since it does not fully explain the reasons to support the writer's previously stated opinion. Always remember, a writer should never contradict himself in these essays unless a clear compare and contrast discussion question or writing instruction is provided.